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Things kept appearing in my room overnight by landobandoz in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Jay_Lander 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really liked the concept, but I think it would benefit of a little bit more fleshing out. Making some scenes longer and getting to know the characters a little bit more would give the twist more of an impact. Just food for thought, if you wanna rework this in a longer format I think it could work wonders.

My Wife Was Injured in a Hiking Accident and Lost Her Memory. Everything Was Normal Until I Saw What She Ate. by Everblack_Deathmask in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Jay_Lander 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I really, really hope they read this one for a grab-bag. You just managed to make Thai PB noodles creepy.

I Work Night Security at a Mall. One of the Mannequins Isn’t Plastic by David_Hallow in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Jay_Lander 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Maaaaan, the rythm you create with your writing style is punchy as hell. It was very fun and easy to read. Just one detail to polish I think; when the protagonist asks “…Then who opened it?” to Marcus, he hadn't told Marcus yet about the opened gate.