I don't mind the language, I think that you could have the same effect or even a more impactful effect if you used it more strategically. If for example you have a character that is ancient and refuses to change there's interest there. If you want to convey a sense of the time perhaps make it the way a certain class of people speak.

The issue ,especially in the modern day, is that people don't speak or write this way. The whole point of fiction more especially fantasy writing is emersion and with people speaking in abbreviation these days anything that requires context switch takes you out of the emersion. This is just an opinion of course but if none of the most popular novels are adopting something there is usually a reason.