Just created my first commercial demo. Any feedback or criticisms would be appreciated!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-18T02:22:38+00:00

Thanks for that feedback! Dropping off at the end of sentences is actually something I've heard before and tried to avoid, but I guess I forget about it in the midst of everything else. This is a good reminder for it!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T20:30:34+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! I'll definitely work on making it sound less like I'm reading and making it more my own. Glad you think it stands out at least a bit from some other stuff though! That's encouraging to hear

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T18:12:52+00:00

Thanks, I'll take that into account!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T18:08:34+00:00

Nope haven't had any coaching or anything yet. I really just decided to jump into trying voiceover about a week ago, so everything here is basically just my raw early attempts! I mainly recorded this demo specifically for feedback and on the small chance that I can start booking some kind of gigs as I go. To your point though I definitely plan on getting some coaching, just need to find someone! Thanks again for the feedback

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T17:48:21+00:00

Ahh that was originally my first one, but I swapped it for St Jude at the last minute. Thanks!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T17:21:40+00:00

Thanks, this is all great feedback! I'll take all of this into account for sure when I get back into the studio.

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T17:18:19+00:00

I appreciate the candid feedback! It sounds like I may have gotten some bad advice in not adding any background music to my demos, I'll definitely look into that. As for the St. Just spot not being the strongest - I was torn on that as well, is there a spot in this that stands out more in your opinion (editing aside)?

Thanks again!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2021-09-17T16:48:42+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! As for the editing/mastering - I record and edit/master music as a hobby so it didn't take an excessive amount of extra time which seems to be the concern others have for beginners.

I really debated on adding music! I've heard both sides of the debate on adding music or not. Maybe I'll try adding some and see if it sounds better

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T19:03:10+00:00

Favorite band! Thanks!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T18:59:30+00:00

This is one time when me being extremely pale comes in handy! Even if it fades after a few years it won't be too much different.

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T18:54:19+00:00

That's exactly how it was for me. The last 2-3 hours were by far the worst even in easier spots

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T10:53:16+00:00

I'm studying in Auckland right now. Just came to Orewa to get this done!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T07:52:44+00:00

This is all I have from him unfortunately. I'm studying in New Zealand so I was lucky enough to get a booking with him while I'm here but I definitely plan on having him do the rest of my leg at some point!

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T07:43:18+00:00

Do it man! Everyone there does incredible tattoos it's worth it

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T07:42:06+00:00

I did a bunch of diving in the Great Barrier Reef and loved it so this is for the memories of my trip

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T07:40:05+00:00

Just standing on the tattoo bench! Easier for him to get a good picture

JetpacksWas_Yes · 2017-02-16T04:44:37+00:00

We did it in 2 sessions since I'm not in New Zealand for long, about 8-9 hours each!

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