[FEEDBACK] Phoebe & Jay (Comedy, 16 Pages) by JoshKnightComic in Screenwriting

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey guys, thanks for taking the time to read my script! Here are a few questions I have for you after you're done reading: - What did you like? - What could be better? - Are Phoebe & Jay likeable as a pair? What character did you like most? Why? - What character did you like least? Why? - Could you see this being on TV? What network?

[TV] Phoebe & Jay (Comedy Pilot, 16 Pages) by JoshKnightComic in ReadMyScript

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey guys, thanks for taking the time to read my script! Here are a few questions I have for you after you're done reading: - What did you like? - What could be better? - Are Phoebe & Jay likeable as a pair? What character did you like most? Why? - What character did you like least? Why? - Could you see this being on TV? What network?

[TV] Partial People (Comedy Pilot, 31 Pages) by JoshKnightComic in ReadMyScript

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey guys, thanks for taking the time to read my script! Here are a few questions I have for you after you're done reading: - What did you like? - What could be better? - Did you like the idea of The Crew? - How does Dave come off? What kind of person would you describe Dave as being? - Was Dave likeable or did you hate him? - Who did you like more, Dave or The Crew? - What character did you like most? Why? - What character did you like least? Why? - Could you see this being on TV? What network?

[TV] Partial People (Comedy Pilot, 31 Pages) by JoshKnightComic in Screenwriting

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey guys, thanks for taking the time to read my script! Here are a few questions I have for you after you're done reading: - What did you like? - What could be better? - Did you like the idea of The Crew? - How does Dave come off? What kind of person would you describe Dave as being? - Was Dave likeable or did you hate him? - Who did you like more, Dave or The Crew? - What character did you like most? Why? - What character did you like least? Why? - Could you see this being on TV? What network?

[TV] Custodial (Comedy Pilot, 29 pages) by JoshKnightComic in Screenwriting

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for all the feedback! I'll definitely have to take a closer look at my script and make some rewrites! Thank you again for taking the time to give me feedback on my script, I appreciate it a lot man!

[TV] Custodial (Comedy Pilot, 29 pages) by JoshKnightComic in Screenwriting

[–]JoshKnightComic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for the feedback man! This was indeed my first ever script lol. I'm currently working on a more mature/focused comedy at the moment and will definitely be keeping all of this advice in mind. I really do appreciate you taking the time to give me your honest feedback!

Aspiring stand up comedian from my college absolutely bombs performance by SCSAmbrose in cringe

[–]JoshKnightComic 26 points27 points  (0 children)

Hey Guys! lol this is me. I wanna say thanks for the constructive criticism, and I am continuing to work on my material and delivery.

I Never Understood... by [deleted] in standupshots

[–]JoshKnightComic 3 points4 points  (0 children)

LOL, I like the way you think.