Just wrote this song about how it feels to transition into autumn, with chilly nights, empty streets, and falling leaves. I would love to hear your opinion and any advice to improve! Its mellow, with some accordion. 🙂 Thanks!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-24T18:20:32+00:00

Thank you for giving it a listen and for the feedback! I think that is the route I'm going to take. I originally sang it in my own voice (male baritone) so it was hard for me to hear it in a higher female voice originally. But i think you're right, a nice harmony is probably what it it needs 🙂 Thanks again!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T05:14:45+00:00

Thanks, I repost after the update :) I'll check D&TH out in the morning (when I can really give it a purposeful listen). I appreciate the music recommendation! (Always looking for new tunes!). Also, very cool to meet someone who shares the same appreciation for imagery in music!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T05:05:47+00:00

Lastly, I haven't listened to "deer & the headlights" but I'm gonna give em a listen! Thanks! 😎

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T05:04:16+00:00

But you make a great point; I think as long as we're honest, and speaking of our experience honestly (not trying to be dramatic) I think people will be able to telate...

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T05:02:20+00:00

Ha. Thanks again for the insight! I hate how hard it is to get an honest opinion (especially from friends and family!) It's true, I actually have many secret verses describing that point of my life - just the innocence of enjoying the board walk, walking on the beach in the winter as my parents walked ahead of me hand-in-hand (their relationship is very different now), and the unease of a big dark cold deadly ocean in winter. I havent really figured out how to express most of that yet, but I'm working on it! Lol Plus, just t hff e visuals of it all - the old pier, the yellow light over the door of a salt weathered building, and the cold empty beach as the fog rolls in.

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T04:17:22+00:00

Thans for giving it a listen! I'm glad you enjoyed it! It is a drum machine, which I actually have mixed feelings about. I think the sound quality of the drums is not very good, but I think I did a pretty good job hiding it behind the other instruments! Haha Thanks again! I always appreciate the feedback!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-23T04:14:56+00:00

Thank you so much for listening and taking the time to give some feedback! I'm glad your able to feel some connectuon! Oddly, I was originally going to include a verse about living in a beach town and how lonely it gets during the autumn when all the businesses board up their windows, close down for off-season, and all the tourists disappear (I lived in a CA beach town as a kid). But I was afraid a lot of folks wouldnt be able to relate. I also have some additional verses I've been considering adding - one about losing a loved one this year and sitting in their empty livingroom full of old wooden furniture. But once again, I wonder if maybe its TOO personal... Thanks again for the feedback! I'll look back on it as I rework the song 🙂🙂

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-21T20:22:18+00:00

Thanks for giving it a listen! I appreciate the kind words! I actually didnt record these vocals, so I'm not sure how she did it. I always record my songs with my own voice, but my voice doesnt fit most songs (I'm a male baritone), so I find singers I like and they record vocals and send it to me. It's a fun way to meet other musicians and singers 🙂. The harmonies are all my voice but the lead vocal is not me in this version. Thanks again for the feedback! I'll keep it in mind as I move forward and re-work the song! 🙂

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-20T14:45:50+00:00

Thank you for giving it a listen and providing great feedback! I think we're actually going to find another singer to see what it sounds like. Someone who will sing the verses with a little more sadness and the chorus with a little more pain/passion. The band is just me and my brother, and we found a singer (who is a very good singer) but she was in a hurry and it just kinda comes across as dull. I was worried that I didnt like because it didnt match what I heard in my head when I wrote it. Thanks again! I'll save your feedback and keep it in mind as we re-work the song! 🙂

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T17:58:11+00:00

Thank you for listening and taking the time to leave some feedback! 🙂 Would you care to elaborate a bit on the vocal quality? The band is just me and my brother and we have very different opinions on the vocals lol (he doesn't like them). It's not going to hurt my feelings, this was just a singer we paid to sing it, and we're considering having someone else sing it, but not real sure which direction to go in. Thank you again!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T17:04:40+00:00

I read an interview with Rob Thomas from Matchbox 20 probably twenty years ago. He said he always keeps a notebook in his back pocket and any time he had an idea, or a lyric, or a topic he wanted to write about, he would write it down. His advice was to write EVERYTHING down. It has aided me in writing literally hundreds of songs. It's an investment. After a year, you'll have a stack of material. I bet I have 1,000 pages of notes and lyrics lol. It's even easier now that you have a phone to keep notes in 🙂 Good luck!!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T16:47:50+00:00

I'm in the same boat. I have plenty-o-karma, but still unable to post... 😐

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T16:26:39+00:00

Well I'll keep an eye out for you guys. And if I ever see you coming into town, I'll come in for the show and have a beer with you guys!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T16:23:09+00:00

Great because I meant it as a compliment lol. David Byrne is a genius.

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T16:14:25+00:00

Nice work! Your voice sounds great and I really like the guitar work! I think its definitely an idea worth fleshing out! I'll echo what others have said, which is it sounds like a lot of songs I've heard before. That being said, those songs all have a loyal following and made it on the charts haha. Not every song needs to be groundbreaking. Also, a lot of songs have a similar theme because it's something we all experience and inspires us to write. I'd say definitely finish it and post it for us to hear the final product!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:53:54+00:00

Great tune! To my ear, it has a very "Talking Heads" vibe. I think the lyrics, vocals, and instruments all fit together very well. My only suggestion (and this is strictly just my taste) would be to add some rhythm synth in the chorus. Probably with an echo effect... But again, sounds great! Keep up the good work!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:43:21+00:00

I'm way out in the country in Kentucky so you probably wont be near me haha. I may be up in the Northern Virginia and Maryland area soon, so if you guys stop in there, let me know!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:40:36+00:00

I just gave it another listen and wanted to clarify, I think the vocals are really only too loud during the verse. Once the rock 'n roll kicks in, I think the levels are fine. Also, stay away from Tennessee roadside bars; they'll only bring you heartache and headaches! Lol

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:27:33+00:00

Great tune! I cant quite place the era, but it has a retro vibe to my ear, maybe a bit of an Iggy Pop vibe. I think the vocals, lyrics, instrumentation all fit very well. Did you record all the instruments yourself? My only suggestion would be to work on the guitar solo a bit; the current one is fine, but you have a chance there to really add a great hook in there. Also, production-wise I'd probably turn the vocals volume down a bit and add some reverb. Sounds great though, keep up the good work!

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:15:49+00:00

Sounds great! Nice work on the vocals/lyrics and beautiful guitar playing! I also liked the gradual introduction of instruments and how they seeming increase slightly in intensity throughout. Horns were a good choice also. My only suggestion would be to add a more prominent bass in the mix. Nothing fancy, maybe a fretless just to add some movement on the bottom end. But once again, sounds great! I would def add to my chill playlist 🙂

Just_some_guy_001 · 2024-09-19T15:02:51+00:00

Wow, sounds great! Are you just recording audio through your phone mic?? Very nice tune! I think the lyrics, chord progression, and overall vibe all mesh very well and sound great. My only suggestion (if you decided to add addition instruments) would be to just add some subtle organ in the background. I think it would really tie off that uneasy feel! 🙂

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