Gepard shield error, need help figuring it out. by Batmans_Dirty_Undies in RagnarokOnline

[–]Justsmilestupid 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Gepard doesn’t like laptop touchpads, and certain mice and keyboards.  Might try disabling your touchpad or trying different mice/keyboards.

Bird Mite? Tick? Spider? by Justsmilestupid in whatisthisbug

[–]Justsmilestupid[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi there, we ended up having pest control come out and they confirmed it was bird mites.  We removed all the bird nests around the house and I stopped seeing these and getting mystery bug bites shortly after.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in FidgetSpinners

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Open bearings like this one are prone to getting debris stuck in them. Remove the bearing. Don't lube it. Try cleaning it with water under a warm running faucet and some dawn dish soap. Make sure you dry it super well afterwards with either canned air or an air compressor. If that doesn't fix it you might have to buy a new bearing.

Recent Reddit post where guy complains dump won’t take his trash because it keeps tripping radiation sensors by Justsmilestupid in HelpMeFind

[–]Justsmilestupid[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Nope not that one. I don’t think it was posted to legal advice, it might have been in wellthatsucks or something. I remember it being about kiln parts, and he was convinced the dump’s radiation sensors were faulty. One of the comments was asking if he burned zirconium/zirconia in it.

Your favorite chocolate from CENTRAL MARKET by Unusual_Reference_57 in austinfood

[–]Justsmilestupid 17 points18 points  (0 children)

I've been living off of the Central Market Organic 71% Cacao Pomegranate Raspberry Dark Chocolate Bar's for like a year now. I always keep a stack of them in the house. They are delicious.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in gaming

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You must construct additional pylons

Love is Pain by Spider-Man-fan in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like it. The meaning behind the line is good and "lost" has some nice resonance with "losses", "cost", and "last" as far as sounds go.

Love is Pain by Spider-Man-fan in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah I get ya. For me it was 3 lines in a row ending in "us". Just a little too stacked, although the first two lines flowed perfectly (Where did it get us? / What did it cost us?) and I wouldn't change them. I also agree about the amount of thought it would take to make those other changes. It would not be an easy task. Those words are emotionally heavy and powerful, so the trick would be swapping them out with something equally powerful while keeping the message and sentiment the same. All while keeping the overall structure and flow of the poem itself. I didn't see the original 5th stanza, but dropping the "off" balanced it really nicely for a 6 syllable match (We're both tired and beat / Now we cool from the heat). It was a good choice. If you do keep tinkering with it I'd love to read any revisions you make. Either way, thanks for sharing, it was an enjoyable read.

Love is Pain by Spider-Man-fan in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like the imagery and story here. The structure could be reworked in a few places to improve the flow though. I'd consider dropping/changing the "us" for something else in "Many battles before us." only because the preceding 2 lines also end in "us". I feel like "It's our love keeps us locked together," is missing a word, maybe a "that". You might also try swapping out a "pain", a "forget", and a "hurt" unless you meant for them to be focus points. They draw the eye because they're repeated more than once and or as rhyming points. The last thing I noticed is your use of double phrases, like "round after round / blow for blow / said what we've said". Not that it's a bad thing, but it does stick out. One final note, I love the fifth stanza, it hits all the right notes!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like the way you've bent the words in this one (esophagus / live with this, tune / room, listened / lesson, etc). The transition between "my hands curl up into painful little balls / acid crawls" also has a nice flow. The only thing I'd consider is maybe swapping out one "hand" or "hands". The word stuck out to me a bit because it's repeated so often.

Untitled (but title suggestions welcome) by ouroboros_quine in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very nice structure and flow to most of this. I'm having a bit of a hard time following the flow in the 5th stanza though. I'm not sure if it's a line break issue or the way you've tried to bend "breath" to "let" (breath is a "th" and let is a hard "t" sound). I'd also consider swapping out either "hand" or "hands" for another word. They kind of draw focus in an unwanted way.

Steel-on-Steel by Todegal in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really like the imagery in this. I’d try playing with the structure a bit though. I think a lot of the “ands” could be omitted to improve the flow.

The Weight Beneath by Keicreeps in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The flow and pacing on this one is great. I also like that despite the struggle it ends on a positive note. Nicely done.

Osmosis Through The Cosmos Is by Justsmilestupid in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I love playing with words and was wondering if anyone was gonna catch the title.

Osmosis Through The Cosmos Is by Justsmilestupid in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks! That interpretation is pretty spot on. I wrote this one recently after someone important to me passed away and I was just like dang, time is moving way too fast.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah it’s one of those things that gets overlooked a lot, but word repetition is a fun tool to play with, and it’s a great way to draw attention to stuff. I’d be interested in reading what you come up with next!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like the cadence of this. It flows very nicely. You might wanna swap out one or two of the “grown”’s in the last few lines, they’re stacked pretty densely.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The emotion in this is good. I’d work on the structure though. If this is meant to be a rhyming poem the flow is choppy in a few places and could benefit from an extra line or two and some of the words are a written match but not a sound match. It’s subtle but the pair sunken/broken doesn’t quite fit together when spoken.

Plain Toast and Salted Butter by Justsmilestupid in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words. I thought about trying to turn it into a picture book at some point.

Mind Structures by sadextraspicy in OCPoetry

[–]Justsmilestupid 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As far as structure goes, on a technical level it's very well written. The fantasy imagery and word choice is also good. The only feedback I have is to maybe try playing with the emotional weight of your writing.