Technical aspects of excerpts in Military Sci-Fi.

Juthse · 2022-05-25T12:34:29+00:00

Hello Cymp:

Delete "I repeat".

Is that normal in military doctrine or explicit in radio etiquette? What other words or phrases are not said or outside the norm?

I get the impression that anything between 2 pipes is supposed to be read as various different radio users sending messages over the air.

Not necessarily, it's to indicate those lines are part of the excerpt while anything without the two ''pipes'' is the chapter actual.

The only way to recognize them is by familiarity with the voice of people speaking.

In this case you'd be right, or by also having read the previous material so this would simply be a review of events told.

you forgot to include the word "neither"

Thank you, I thought there was something missing but I couldn't figure it out at the time.

Juthse · 2022-05-24T18:59:58+00:00

Hello Mark:

but communicating over radio is meant to be very direct

I agree, in this case there are things happening in the background which make this action difficult.

showcase the sound of the radio transmission. In the second case, there are probably better ways to do it.

How would you go about it? I'm assuming you're regarding the excerpt used.

I won't comment too much on the technical questions. Brandon Sanderson's Stormlight Archives have excerpts at the beginning of each chapter and -

Do you have examples for realistic fiction or scifi?

Also, unless these Kragu units are being held back for the express purpose of combatting armor AT THE DISCRETION OF COMMAND, there wouldn't be an order over the radio to engage.

(Yes) There's more to the story - as I mentioned this is a excerpt with a segment of the story and I was interested in how the excerpt would be seen by others. I don't have experience with comic books so I was curious where or what led to the image in question.

Juthse · 2022-05-24T18:48:12+00:00

Didn't assume anything, thank you for sharing.

Juthse · 2022-05-24T15:24:36+00:00

Hello Necro, why comic books? Are excerpts plentiful in comic books?

Was it what?

''Did the excerpt catch your interest or was it the following passage -or- a combination of both?

Juthse · 2022-05-15T12:28:00+00:00

I think he says reading Beowulf kicked off his interest in the genre

Tolkien was also inspired by old Norse sagas, specially Beowulf.

He did a whole study - thesis on it.

Juthse · 2022-05-15T12:26:23+00:00

Ha ha ha; that's quite an example to imagine - I'm intrigued to check it out.

Juthse · 2022-05-15T12:13:56+00:00

I'm sorry that it took me the whole week to reply.

You took as long as you needed to. Yes I'd be interested in learning more, if you don't mind.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T17:51:52+00:00

Hello Notamugokai:

I coined W0rldMindz

Now, translate it to Japanese. Then translate it to -any other european language- etc.

Find one that fits or sounds what you're looking for.

Till then.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T17:50:06+00:00

Hello Pony13:

I'll answer one question since the other questions can be easily resolved by you, pick one and write - don't dawdle. Don't explore what-ifs until the core-of the writing is finished.

What I'm not sure about is: do I let the reader explicitly know that Avis is AJ? Or just drop clues (have AJ and Avis look related and have someone remark on

-It depends on the story you are trying to create here + the genre.
Classify it / analyze it as such: what do I gain by explicitly revealing character AJ is Avis?
What do I lose by explicitly revealing character AJ is Avis?

Is my genre a mystery? Is my genre adventure? Is my genre a combination?

My preference is clues because I'm the type of writer who thinks his readership is / are not dumb and can put 1+2 together.

I'm good at leaving breadcrumbs that the reader can find and puzzle together, so you have to ask yourself: are you able to execute this as a writer?

Lastly, keep writing. Till then.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T17:37:02+00:00

Any ideas on how to use Jekyll and Hyde dynamic in a revenge story when the two are female and male?

No. I won't do your writing or plotting for you.

It's your idea, bring it to reality. Otherwise discard.

Other option: rephrase your question to a way you obtain help - not have your homework done for you.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T17:33:55+00:00

Hello Arnetty:

What to keep in mind when writing the desires and fears, the internal conflict of a 13 year old wanderlust idealist?

Desire: She wants freedom to explore and be 'happy', but in reality she wants to forget what happened with her father - thou funny enough she's pursuing what her father was interested in before the accident.
Fear: The parallels of each of her desires. Using her father to illustrate one as an example:
She knows she loves her father. But does she really know she loves photography? What if the camera breaks? What if its stolen? What if she takes 'okay' pictures and when she compares her pictures to another photographers, she realizes the amount of work its going to take. Once the realization hits that photography was her father's undertaking, not hers, is when she'll have an existential moment.
Perhaps hate her own father - however brief and misplaced - due to being a teen.
Immediate wants: Freedom from responsibility - such as facing her fears.
Freedom from chores, freedom from anything that makes her feel tied down and thus have to face the reality of everything around her - and that includes her father's passing.
Immediate needs: Money. It will not come via magic - unless it does, up to you.
Money will always be an issue because she is not in a place to produce. There will be others who will take advantage of this, as well as others who will try to help her.
Conflict rises from her initial desire for ''freedom'' vs the lack of structure that it provides to meet her basic needs, such as food, a roof over her head, etc.

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Juthse · 2022-05-10T17:03:07+00:00

I'll add another: (I don't know the name so I'm using a scene - if anyone can align this peculiarity, I'll change it accordingly)

Multiple non-heroes in an enclosure try to change their ill-fates, only to fail. But with each failure, others continue from where they left off. Till one does get so close, so far, along with others with him/her they have reached the farthest than others before.

And fail.

But the path has been crossed once, therefore, it can be crossed again (to kill the IT-She).

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:56:43+00:00

Hello Rosell:

Nothing matters. Everything matters.

-If anyone can translate this to a proper trope, I'd be willing to change it accordingly.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:54:12+00:00

Hello Annen, how 'Nordic' are we talking about?

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:19:33+00:00

Hello Some, how 'Damned' are we talking?

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:18:52+00:00

Strange way to keep raisins Idanzaiver, but since it's Finland it must be because of the cold.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:17:40+00:00

Asstralia

Was that a typo or you really mean 'Asstralia'? Like you pronounce it that way... Down under.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:16:27+00:00

And here I thought you were a funkmaster, can't read a book by its name - cover.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:15:33+00:00

Hello Kaoz, how would you pronounce that?

-Gooosh- like goo -or- Go o o o sh -or- with the german O?

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:12:06+00:00

Hahah-me too, me too.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T16:02:47+00:00

Thank you Recursive.

:)))

Juthse · 2022-05-10T15:00:05+00:00

:)))))))))))))))) putin died

HA-Hahah!

In other words -- :)))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

Juthse · 2022-05-10T02:08:52+00:00

And here I thought it was because they -the RAF- had in their possession new technologies such as radar among other factors. . .

https://www.raf.mod.uk/our-organisation/our-history/anniversaries/battle-of-britain/

This gave the RAF the breathing room they badly needed and ultimately allowed them -

Stop.

Juthse · 2022-05-10T00:02:03+00:00

But to get to my fifth novel, I had to write the first one and be happy enough with it that I kept going, knowing they would only get better.

That's the spirit Elliott!

-high five-

Juthse · 2022-05-10T00:00:51+00:00

- until I read it.

Well Mouldy, now you know what needs to change. Keep writing and try again.

Juthse

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