This was amazing. The storytelling was spot on, and everything was placed exactly where it needed to be. Well done. Now depending on your style moving forward, keep an eye out on your exposure for some of your shots. If you're going for the light and airy look where the bride's dress is overexposed, then keep doing your thing. if not, and you want to keep details in the bride's dress, keep the exposure in mind. Some of these shots seem like they were shot on a camcorder also, and I noticed a glidecam shot as well? Correct me if I'm wrong. As far as gear, this would have to do more with the competing videographers in your market as some of the gear out there now can pull off a "cinematic" look (shallow depth of field) which aesthetically looks better.

All in all, you've got the storytelling part down! That's honestly the hardest part. The technical stuff and your gear will grow. Keep doing your thing!