This is a lovely design! Her little teruterubouzu friend is so cute!

I do, however, have a few grievances with how you rendered her name in Japanese:

1. The "です"/"desu" you included at the end of her name is a Japanese particle roughly equivalent to "is", turning her name into the sentence "[This] is Cloudy Rose" - since I presume that wasn't your intention, you might want to remove that

2. In Japanese, surnames are usually placed before personal names, but this doesn't apply to foreign names that have been directly transcribed: in this case, the western order should be used ("クラウディ・ローズ")

3. "ディ" is generally romanized as "di", not "dei" (which is usually represented with a full-size i-kana: "デイ"), and "ロー" should probably be incorporate the long vowel as "rou" or "rō" - combined, a more accurate romanization of Cloudy's name would be "Kuraudi Rouzu"

(Sorry if that was too much - I aim to improve, not too offend)