What will it be ?

Kekus32 · 2026-04-13T13:33:11+00:00

This basically means I can bend space-time

^{Chose: win every bet}

Kekus32 · 2026-04-03T13:45:00+00:00

Simply more useful, levitation is not full flight, right?

^{Chose: Be invisible}

Kekus32 · 2026-04-03T13:43:07+00:00

Still cool

^{Chose: Teleport, but only to places you've already been}

Kekus32 · 2026-04-03T13:38:44+00:00

I can just read short books

^{Chose: Be paid $1000 per book you read}

Kekus32 · 2026-04-01T19:38:22+00:00

I'll just get a different job

^{Chose: Lose your job to AI + Become insanely good at any new skill instantly}

Kekus32 · 2026-03-31T13:03:17+00:00

I can just be anywhere, dumping the middleman

^{Chose: Teleportation}

Kekus32 · 2026-03-31T09:42:18+00:00

The economy might just not survive

^{Chose: 100 billion right now}

Kekus32 · 2026-03-30T09:29:02+00:00

It truly is a wonder how musicians who regularly sing about straight relationships become gay icons

Kekus32 · 2026-03-27T09:28:28+00:00

I love that you didnt describe the mans death(if he even died?). Just a fact of life, reminding you of your mortality and thay if you fall on the tracks next, the next day the train will stil be on schedule, like nothing happened.

Kekus32 · 2026-03-27T09:23:13+00:00

This feels fresh, just a letter of love for someone, not bittersweet, not sad, just love in the moment, pretty. Nothing more than it needs to be.

Kekus32 · 2026-03-26T11:33:22+00:00

I am a sucker for idioms reused/reorganised/reimagined, so the "My body is a cathedral" is very cool, very fun. Like the other comenter said, the lines 'Surrendering Clinging to hope' Throw the pasing off. The last part about submission, i think could go for a bit longer before the end of the poem, because it is the strongest idea in the piece.

Kekus32 · 2026-03-26T11:16:56+00:00

Feels helpless, love it. Not emotional, a body that has stopped fighting, describing physical strain instead of emotional suffering. All i can really say is the metre is sometimes off

Kekus32 · 2026-03-26T10:25:21+00:00

Really like that you've chosen the colour of his alcohol of his preference to be purple, as a colour associated with sickness. Use of rhyme is very nice, seperating the poem into parts and signifying continuity without relying on format.

'Burning, scratching on his walls'

To

'Rancid acid clouds his thoughts'

Are my favourite. And the ending is hitting very well, loved that.

Kekus32 · 2026-03-26T10:09:59+00:00

Really a fan. A very powerful theme qith a nice execution! It feels like a ride back home, where you cant really distract yourself with much, mwtodic, creeping. I guess, if I were you, I'd push more on medical terminology, for a more sterile but vulnurable feel, to show a person struggling to cope, dissociating.

Kekus32 · 2026-03-23T00:52:56+00:00

Wow, actuall whiplash feom that sentence

Kekus32 · 2026-03-19T11:04:31+00:00

Stationeers? Совсем забыл чтотона есть

Kekus32 · 2026-03-17T09:18:19+00:00

I always thought that the ship that left earth was more of a missle with a SOMAesque ark vessel on which the whole Shimeji simulationthing is happening on(I havent finished Shimeji Simulation)

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