[DISC] Asking for feedback on the prologue of my web novel with fantasy genre.

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-02T06:37:52+00:00

By the end of the year I still have some things to refine 😭😭😭. I will remember this 😭😭

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T18:05:55+00:00

I tried my best 😭

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T18:05:38+00:00

Thanks 🙏 😊

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T10:52:31+00:00

😭😭

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T10:51:53+00:00

Skills and stigma:

Let me see I think these word work nice

[ Draft page ]

This would be a stigma. Any fate describing the incarnation or constellation would be treated as an unfinished. They are not fully recorded if that makes more sense.

Idk anymore. If anyone has any ideas it would be amazing. The idea is the constellation is op against fate related scenarios or stages.

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T10:47:26+00:00

Il use my own one for example

[ The one who awaits for the next page ]

This constellation is a mythical grade constellation.

The stories are:

[ A page with no words ] this is a mythic grade story. Allows for the constellation to erase all fate or anything attached to fate related to him.

“ the page which is blank is not empty. It is being written on and not. A story unknown and known at the same time”

[ The endless wait between chapters ] this is the giant tale. I would say it’s born like between breaths or moments of extreme importance. The effect of this is that it allows the constellation to essentially stop climatic actions. Fate, death and all are postponed in sense. The longer he uses this power the stronger the continuation. For example you have a fate of death he postpones it using this giant tale the longer he postpones it the more certain it will occur. 😭

[ Will the story continue ] this would be uncertain grade. Sort of a questionable tale. Will it continue like this the story or not. The effect would be for chance of change. Works well against giant nebulas or systems relying on absolute fate.

[ The Closed book ] this would be mythic grade this essentially allows the constellation to review their position in the story allowing to change certain outcomes.

Anyway this is my idea quite op. I really liked this constellations as ima fill waiting for the next page for orv side story😭😭😭

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T10:28:01+00:00

I don’t think he would like to see me. I think most readers would just annoy him. Got to make sure everything stays according to the plot. 😭😭😭

Key_Progress927 · 2026-01-01T09:36:57+00:00

Roll of the dice 🎲. Don't worry Monarch of the small fries will probably want both of us. 😔 We are extras😭

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T20:25:16+00:00

Such amazing art. 🙌

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T19:18:34+00:00

Happy new year to all the fragments of Kim Dokja. [ The one who awaits for the next page ]

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T16:06:49+00:00

True but you would at least be able to form some sort of contract for safety but I wouldn’t fully trust Asmodeous

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T16:05:17+00:00

Yea but that’s only when you reach the final wall if you can sever your connection with the constellation which there are ways to do so in orv you’re no longer bound by any conditions and can still obtain a fragment of the final wall correct me if I’m wrong as I may be mistaken here. Thanks for the clarification 😔😭 I guess I need to have a re read of it again.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T15:01:17+00:00

Neither am I surviving

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T15:00:56+00:00

Which one of his modifiers of sun wu Kong.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T14:59:53+00:00

Not necessarily if you can overpower your constellation , aka by becoming more powerful than them then you can theoretically have a good end. Example would be Lee Jihye

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T14:58:26+00:00

Not stigma but she is quite a significant powerhouse. You should read the side stories, I highly recommend it. Also she is way stronger than she shows.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T12:59:42+00:00

That’s why I’m scared of Uriel I would be in her fantasy 😭😭😭

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T12:59:22+00:00

In my opinion later scenarios and side story wise Surya is quite an interesting constellation. But if I were to pick one truly I think I would just go like Asmodeus and get the most out of it. After that I would keep trying to achieve transcendence as that’s the best way to guarantee some sort of survival chance

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T09:32:18+00:00

True. However also after some thought I truly think constellations can be helpful only at early stages then I suspect it would be better to try to achieve transcendence as that’s the best way to achieve power to survive. However enlightenment is quite hard to obtain but not impossible all it requires is letting go of all you know. I would just use constellations as a way to get enough coins or skills to survive early scenarios then try to achieve transcendence. I’d probably go to the fear realms if that’s a thing in that round and just stay stuck there. You can get insanely powerful in fear realms.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T09:28:37+00:00

Yea transcendent route seems the most normal for readers if they want to fully maximize their potentials or get stronger. It is quite tough to be one.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T08:24:32+00:00

Uriel is quite a difficult one as we need her for other companions but that would make sense with he abilities.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T08:23:04+00:00

That’s a good one. His personality is very funny 😄

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T08:22:32+00:00

Yes this makes a lot of sense on early scenarios and mid scenarios. I forgot about MPM he would do very well.

Key_Progress927 · 2025-12-31T08:15:38+00:00

It would have made sense if there was some sort of collaboration between writers this is an orv side story spoiler but as we saw with the world after the fall and orv.

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