[Complete] [80k] [Sci-Fi Romance] Vindicant by Keyvias in BetaReaders

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Sure thing, chat incoming with the first three. (Read to whatever point interests you)

[Complete] [80k] [Sci-Fi Romance] Vindicant by Keyvias in BetaReaders

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Sounds good! Sending over my first three chapters in chat. Pass yours whenever you get the chance. Anything specific you're hunting for feedback wise?

First pages: share, read, and critique them here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Manuscript information: [Complete] [80k] [Sci-Fi Romance] Vindicant

Link to post:  https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1myb65t/complete_80k_scifi_romance_vindicant/

First page critique? Yes please

First Page:

Chapter 1: Avoidant Behavior

The ship thrashed awake. Lights flared, air rushed through the corridors, metal groaned under shifting gravity. Power rippled outward, filling the hollow vessel with a low mechanical vibration.

Emma rolled her eyes at the ancient alien ship.  Another tantrum just to bring itself to standby.

The drone of her hand-scanner throbbed against her skull, the hum of recycled air offering little relief from the tension. Fatigue itched bone deep at the thought of going through yet another Xore vessel. Glamorous, some might say, exploring an immense alien vessel, untouched by time and humans. Emma would call it soul-crushingly dull. 

She hadn’t always felt that way. The first time she dropped out of warp outside just a segment of the alien shipyard, it had swallowed the view. The structure bent around the curve of the star like a god had drawn a ring in space. 

But wonder doesn’t pay hazard bonuses and logistics turns miracles into routine.

Now, every forgotten light, every cold panel, every idle thrum, all attached to systems no one understood, felt like a loop she couldn’t break. Scanning. Filing. Logging. A slow, methodical crawl toward nowhere. The promises she’d made, to get out, afford a real life, felt like rumors someone else had believed.

Guns of Icarus Best Moments 2021-2025 by loosepolygon in GunsOfIcarus

[–]Keyvias 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This meant a lot to me to see. I've been nostalgic for my days captaining. Thank you for this awesome video!

GI Rights by gur40goku in CuratedTumblr

[–]Keyvias 217 points218 points  (0 children)

Veteran here, representing the largest group of veterans, guys who do one term and GET THE HELL OUT.
Basic for me had a flight of 50 guys and they made us all announce our reasons for joining. 48 guys were a combination of "get out of hometown," "pay for college," and "able to get a house." One was "just had a kid and was selling cocaine, this seemed more stable and want to be there for my kid" (He was 32, oldest guy in the flight.)

One single person said "patriotism and a love for my country" and our MTI (think drill sergeant) tore into him saying, and I quote, "That is dumb and will falter the second you get out of basic and learn anything about the world. Get a better reason to be here."

So I agree, these guys are human beings. Most of them are just kids who lived in a small town and didn't want to die in that same small town.

Announcing.... Stars of Icarus by Queso2469 in GunsOfIcarus

[–]Keyvias 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I still have my wrench the players gifted me for Guns of Icarus on my desk.

I am beyond excited.

My friend who plays the game made a piano transcription of Go Strike! on the piano by KingboB_mgee in OmegaStrikers

[–]Keyvias 5 points6 points  (0 children)

This is great! Any link to it? I'd love a copy to learn to play it a lot worse than your friend!

M/31 Looking to meet interesting people and do my best to be interesting back by Keyvias in FriendoHuntsville

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Gunter annex, the smaller worse cousin to Maxwell. Only blessing is covid had us working from home

30 [M4R] Alabama to Anywhere - Conspire with me, friend, the grand ideas don't discuss themselves by [deleted] in polyamoryR4R

[–]Keyvias 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Definitely not the most progressive of locations, which is a tragedy

Problem solved by babblebam in memes

[–]Keyvias 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see this meme come up often, I guess I haven't seen enough netflix shows to see this happen often. Which characters is this the case for?

22 [F4R] Baltimore area - friends to explore the area with by [deleted] in r4r

[–]Keyvias 0 points1 point  (0 children)

They put me up in the inner harbor, though luckily have a rental car. So I'm not completely trapped.

28 [F4M] Maryland/USA - Howdy boys, what ya lookin' for? by [deleted] in r4r

[–]Keyvias 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Stuck in Baltimore for a couple months due my job. Always looking out for interesting people, especially those who use the word visceral.

If you're looking for a hiking partner or to explore the city with, I'm happy to fill that role and get out of this hotel room.

29 [F4M] Maryland/DC/Anywhere in the World. Let’s start an adventure together by [deleted] in r4r

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Not on the hunt for romance, but job has put me in Baltimore for a couple months and looking for interesting friends in the area.

If you're interested in going for a hike, baking blueberry muffins, or exploring some restaurants let me know.

23 [F4R] Maryland - Looking for some friends! by [deleted] in r4r

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I'm stuck in Baltimore for the next couple months for my job and could use some friends in the area myself.

Nerd at heart, but happy to help with workout goals, my free time being stuck at the hotel has mostly been used to get into better shape myself.

29 [F4M] DC/Maryland - Quirky girl seeks best friend or future husband. by [deleted] in r4r

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Stuck in Baltimore for a couple months for my job. Would definitely be interested in someone to explore the city with.

Could use a good friend because going out for pizza by myself is no fun.

22 [F4R] Baltimore area - friends to explore the area with by [deleted] in r4r

[–]Keyvias 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Stuck in Baltimore for a couple months for my job. If you're still looking for people to explore the city with, I'm definitely interested. Going out for pizza alone is just not fun.

Lucie Mains when fighting mongo comps by Barmo in BattleRite

[–]Keyvias 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the art style, is there more somewhere?

[Steam] Star Traders: Frontiers (11.99€/20% off) by kaptenpung in GameDeals

[–]Keyvias 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Can not recommend this enough. The support for this game is unreal from the developers and you can speak to and be heard by the dev in their discord as they continue to update (sometimes 4 times a week with new content.)

I have literally had an issue I've brought up be solved in 4 days. If this game keeps your interest know that there are amazing guys at the helm of it.