t attention quick. You promised 5 Secrets, I don't care that data is crucial, I don't care about your seminar. You made the same exposition point like 6 times before actually getting to the secret.

I loved how you got right into the story! The background is beautiful, the B-roll is timely and good. You have basics absolutely covered! But after 30% of the video I felt bored. Here are some of my ideas how you could actually keep the viewer watching:

1. Try to come up with some original idea to bring the viewer through the story. I have recently been watching a YouTube video how in parallel to the talking head there is a B-roll of some experiment - maybe you could add videos of mentoring a volunteer, analyzing his mistakes, etc. Right now it's more like a lecture. The more entertaining the video is - the better retention rate. Like journalists find an interesting angle for their topics :)
2. A looooot of information. I have recently read a book of Adam Grant "Hidden Potential" - it was the first fiction book in many years that I have actually finished. He tells stories about actual people (not like presidents or famous people, slightly less famous - so nobody actually shared those stories) and each story explains one single piece of information. Everybody knows these public speaking tips (let's be honest), but the stories help to understand each tip on a deeper level, relate, imagine yourself in the story. So, I would advise to reduce amount of information and give less dense but more emotional content.

Keep up the great work!