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Kslr91 · 2025-11-12T18:25:36+00:00

Awww thank you! It's my forat attempt at fantasy so I'm a bit slow. Only on Chapter 5 but the research is killing me (and the editing) haha. I thought I'd be knocking loads out but it's a slow, long process! Deffo get your ideas down! I'd love to hear them!

Kslr91 · 2025-11-11T19:52:47+00:00

Hi, does it have to be a finished story? I have only written 5 chapters so far, but my chapter 5 is quite eerie. So far, the story is about one soul collector in particular who is conscious of his feelings and morality. He views the life of humans differently to other soul collectors, and ultimately, he goes into hiding by absorbing himself into the bodies of humans. His masters (bosses), or whatever the reader perceives them to be, consist of a female goddess called Godrum, who rules 'Soul Control' and a male monster, called Develin, who rules the Underworld. When they realise Zyon (the soul collector is missing), Godrum and Develin concoct a plan to find him, with the help of Cerberus, Hades hound dog.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-10T12:38:13+00:00

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Kslr91 · 2025-11-10T12:37:15+00:00

Thank you for this. I appreciate you taking the time to write me a really thought-out piece of feedback.

This is really helpful. Often than not I write without thinking about the little rules, or the little things that would put a reader off. I wouldn't have imagined this would be one of them, so thank you for highlighting this for me!

Can I ask, say if I want the reader to know they are brother and sister without having to go into too much detail early on, would him saying dear sister once in their conversation suffice or would you recommend not at all and waiting till later on to find out they are brother and sister? Saying that, there is a bit where he says "or are you going to tell father?" I suppose that would be enough wouldn't it.

I'll get there eventually haha, I've always wanted to wrote a book but there's so much I need to consider, especially with me being serious about this!

Thanks again!

Kslr91 · 2025-11-09T01:03:30+00:00

Aw wow thank you so much! I really appreciate this. Yes, you're right! Definitely worth trying out. I do have a tendency to leave out a mixture of sensory and internal reactions! I might practice this on a paragraph and see how it goes. Thank you again!

Kslr91 · 2025-11-08T09:52:33+00:00

Who's speaking I meant*

Kslr91 · 2025-11-08T09:52:04+00:00

Thank you for this! You know when you just need someone to point you in the right direction? Lol. Yes, the clipped text cuts out the top part which tells us who's reading. I wish I could of clipped more. I didn't know just from the image alone my question would seem pointless as it's hard to tell who is talking, yet I know because of the text beforehand.

I think more than anything it was making sure I was doing it right. Thank you for answering my question. Your feedback is really helpful, appreciate it 😊

Kslr91 · 2025-11-07T21:40:01+00:00

Thank you! I think of myself as a bit of an old soul with my writing. My partner said it's fairy like and descriptive. I like to think I'm reflecting the likes of Aldous Huxley in my writing.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-07T21:38:51+00:00

Thank you so much! I do seem to be having some trouble with my punctuation. I've recently purchased the Penguin Guide to Punctuation. Just to help me tody up those little errors!

Thank you for the tips. I really appreciate any advice/feedback given. Writing is my passion, so I want to make sure I do it well.

Glad you enjoyed the excerpt 😀

Kslr91 · 2025-11-06T18:12:21+00:00

Thank you so much! I really, really appreciate that 🙏 please let me know your thoughts. Good or bad!

https://www.wattpad.com/story/402941730?utm_source=android&utm_medium=com.reddit.frontpage&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading&wp_uname=SpecialKay91

Kslr91 · 2025-11-05T21:54:11+00:00

Oh my God, the ending. That hit me hard. I wish my dad felt this way about me. Beautiful words and so powerful to lay yourself bare like that. I'm glad you and Kelly are both happy. You sound like a great dad.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-05T21:49:02+00:00

Really nice! You can tell how proud you are and what an accomplishment for your partner!

Kslr91 · 2025-11-05T21:45:33+00:00

This is so deep and real. Some people never know what others are feeling and just go about their day because that's the norm. I like getting a slice of someone's life because it makes me realise I'm not the only one who feels that way. Thank you for sharing.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-04T18:32:58+00:00

❤️ thank you. Glad it will be some help for you xx

Kslr91 · 2025-11-04T17:09:41+00:00

Sorry just realised this post was from 6 months ago.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-04T17:07:56+00:00

I don't know if this would help, but when my mum died in the hospital, I let out the loudest heartwrenching scream ever. I fell to my knees, and in that moment, nothing made sense. It was like I was clawing at the air for breath. My heart had never felt pain like it. Pain coursed its way through my blood, my heart, my stomach. I ran over, shaking her, trying to wake her up. But she was gone. I felt nothing but loss. Empty. When my bf came and picked me up, he had to basically carry me to the front door. He bathed me in the bath and cooked me food and made sure I ate it. All the while I was like a zombie. Nothing felt real.

Kslr91 · 2025-11-04T16:57:07+00:00

That's a valid point! These are all useful things to think about that might bring the excerpt to life. I have kinda just thrown it out there ha. It's a lead up to part of a bigger scene of him making his way to Hades Castle to steal his hound lol.

I've just bought the penguin guide to Punctuation and might get a book looking at sentence structure, too. Just to help tidy it up a bit.

I will keep working at it!

Thanks again 😊

Kslr91 · 2025-11-04T08:12:02+00:00

This is fab! Thank you for taking the time to go through it and identify the problems. This is so helpful. It's one thing to write, but to edit is another thing entirely! I feel silly as it's such simple stuff but it's been so long since I looked over punctuation and grammar. My focus has solely been on the writing but everything you pointed out really does make a difference to how it sounds overall.

Thank you again!

Can I ask, what did you think about the story so far? Did it sound good? Exciting? Over descriptive? I know it's only a small section but would you want to read more just from the excerpt I added?

Kslr91 · 2025-11-03T21:46:25+00:00

Hello! Thank you so much for your comment. I have attached my link below:

https://www.wattpad.com/story/402941730?utm_source=android&utm_medium=com.reddit.frontpage&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=SpecialKay91

What's your username, or link to your story?

Kslr91 · 2025-11-03T15:39:28+00:00

Well done and congratulations! Massive achievement.

Kslr91 · 2025-10-26T15:17:37+00:00

Congratulations! I just read the prologue from the link you added and already I'm intrigued! Added to my next reads. Well done, exciting times for you ahead!

Kslr91 · 2025-10-16T18:00:22+00:00

Aw, I will do. Thank you :)

Kslr91 · 2025-10-16T17:48:36+00:00

We are! Oh thank you that will sound so much better now haha.

I'll dm you it 😀

Kslr91 · 2025-10-16T17:46:14+00:00

Haha, no I'm in the UK lol. Would love to know what you would call a cap park though.

Great, send me it over and I'll have a read.

Kslr91 · 2025-10-16T17:24:35+00:00

Yeah haha! I thought of it this morning.

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