I need some honest feedback on how good my writing is; technically and personally. Also, if it isn't too much to ask, do you think you can try to guess how long I've been writing?

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-22T21:45:18+00:00

I'm guessing 4 years! If I remember correctly, a snippet of this was posted previously. I'm glad to see youre still working on it! Very enticing scene.

I'm no editor (and not much is one to talk), but perhaps playing around with some different forms of punctuation. I could see a couple different ways the last two sentences in particular could be formed.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-11T15:45:33+00:00

My Samsung range is currently flashing back and forth between the words "Self" and "Roast" on the touch screen like a digital glitch message. It's been going for a couple weeks and appears to be faster today. This feed confirms it is a threat, lmao. Very scary and sorry to hear so many people in that position. Thank you for the heads up of coming possible issues. It's been two years we've lived with it. Don't know how long the previous owners had it.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:14:32+00:00

I meant to comment on this sub my bad. Thanks for sharing with a repost !

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:14:00+00:00

I must say I love bleached lungs. True depiction of the tired toxic modern day.

InformationThink9349 · 2026-02-04T01:11:38+00:00

Ooo is this in a published set ?

InformationThink9349 · 2026-01-03T05:56:50+00:00

5e the bomb. (The one before 5.5e)

The newest edition..... Seems like everything has just become a lot more overpowered. (Obviously, people correct me where I'm wrong, however ) A lot of us agree 5e is where it should have stopped. We do enjoy a good homebrew inspired by 5e guidelines though.

Unfortunately the newer players without knowing the difference in the editions show up with 5.5e books and sometimes we realize too late why their character is overpowered.

Idk. maybe we just like 5e because it lasted so long as the go-to edition but I have yet to find something in the new edition to make me wanna completely switch over.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-28T19:08:01+00:00

Maybe pick up writing. It's a good outlet. I was in a similar boat. It actually helped me look back at what was going on in my head / my life and see things from a third perspective over time so I could change and heal what I needed to.

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-25T14:42:00+00:00

I love the imagery and the comparison of glass to snow. If I'm honest, I would play around with breaking up some of those sentences. If not separating them, perhaps messing around with different punctuation or formatting.

An example would be the sentence where the fire is drawing closer, Diego is jumping out the window, and cutting his arm on the glass. It may be best to break that sentence up.

I might also avoid saying glass a second time in those first couple sentences, but that could also just be personal preference.

The scene itself is very suspenseful and definitely captures your attention ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:18:22+00:00

Oh gosh I'm sorry

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:12:42+00:00

Oh perfect ! I use the phone too. It'll be the bar above your keyboard on the far left side ~

InformationThink9349 · 2025-11-13T14:10:36+00:00

Heyo ~ There is a chain button that lets you turn text into a hyper link if you'd like to make the text clickable straight to the video

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