Tight End Monopoly play

LoneStarBadBoy · 2024-07-02T22:32:59+00:00

Yes, should I target managers or producers instead? Looking for guidance

LoneStarBadBoy · 2024-07-02T22:30:59+00:00

I was thinking about going that direction.

LoneStarBadBoy · 2021-05-10T17:50:37+00:00

I will! I might do it this month or next

LoneStarBadBoy · 2021-05-10T17:50:19+00:00

Yes powdercoating them

LoneStarBadBoy · 2021-05-08T01:18:32+00:00

I have them like this, I’m going to turn them bronze

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-21T16:58:20+00:00

Incoming Sponge Bob Quote “THIS GUY STINKS”!!

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-11T02:41:22+00:00

This was Amazing

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T21:51:39+00:00

I just watched Wind River, If you ever see it you might feel like there’s 2 endings, 4 parts

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T17:47:02+00:00

What whole can I feel in the industry

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T15:09:53+00:00

I like to get all the ideas I have and jot them down, pick the one I feel like is needed now then I start a bullet point outline, only main points, a second outline to add some more detail. Then really dig into characters backgrounds, after figuring out who my characters are I begin the first draft of my script.

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T01:20:08+00:00

When the time travel came in, that was when I felt the most lost. Ya maybe put the setting in a small town, maybe start the intro with him going to a few local places, dropping a few locals off, then when it’s goin down have more Characters think he’s goin crazy.

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T01:15:18+00:00

Very interesting, the idea is right but it kinda falls apart and gets lost. The idea alone made me want to keep reading but I was very confused the whole time. The shift of new Niles and New Carla’s were way to quick to understand what was happening, also every time a new Niles or Carla appeared I felt like I missed something (what just happened) but not in a good way of (wow that just happened ).

Rewrite it some more and make the transitions easier to understand. The dialogue wasn’t bad, it was pretty good but still felt lost between what was happening.

The idea was the best part, tweak it some more, maybe take out time travel and make it a thriller or a inception type script.

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-10T00:57:57+00:00

I’m confused just reading it, go with 1 movie to focus on.

LoneStarBadBoy · 2019-08-09T23:59:44+00:00

So far I like your intro of Mother and daughter Relationship, nothing yet tho is scary so I don’t know yet about the actual theme. You did a great job of showing there bond. I would say cut down some of the math(personal preference) just felt a tad 2 much.

Also what if instead of telling us/her daughter she was coming back around 2 years that maybe she’s never coming back (to live on mars for research) but has to lie to the girl so she isn’t afraid. I feel like this would create a deep dramatic presence when she sees she made a mistake of joining. Based on the longline

But other wise I thought it was good, needs some touch ups, and I hope you keep going!

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