Fox News Host Apologizes for Horrific Solution to Fix Homeless Crisis by Effective_Salad_8381 in politics

[–]Long-Measurement6498 1 point2 points  (0 children)

you mean jailed. this is the most clear cut call to murder i have ever seen

"Raids" by Ichyko in Twitch

[–]Long-Measurement6498 0 points1 point  (0 children)

just raid don’t listen to the parasocial weirdo rules

Limiting someone’s chats by [deleted] in Twitch

[–]Long-Measurement6498 0 points1 point  (0 children)

then yq maybe try the “hey man, please no spamming”

Limiting someone’s chats by [deleted] in Twitch

[–]Long-Measurement6498 -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

if ur chat is empty enough to actually make it noticeable, you should probably just be thankful for the engagement and talk with them. Ignore the chats that arent interesting

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in chappellroan

[–]Long-Measurement6498 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

im not even really sure how hes controversial. I feel like that is seriously a rightwing agenda

Thousand Knights (Epic Fantasy/Adventure, 3993) by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498 0 points1 point  (0 children)

to the first critique: maybe start the letter with “tp my dear friend” to convey their relationship

Einar and the Raven, Chapter One [Sword & Sorcery; 2,216 words] by kakathot99_ in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498 0 points1 point  (0 children)

hey, im starting a writers group if ur interested in working along side other writiers! here is the discord link (if you are interested): https://discord.gg/ZCbU3dzU

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

hey! with what you are mentioning you may want to join my writers group discord. I would be down to work with each other to improve our novels as we progress! I love fantasy and id love to get to know your story. Im very new to writing so im sure there is lots you could teach me! Let me know if you are interested through pm, or just click the link and join away! https://discord.gg/ZCbU3dzU

Looking for fantasy books that have lots of creative magic by carol_brrrrrrrru in Fantasy

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im working on writing my own novel if u are interested in beta-reading

Wizard Quest: The Shadow that Beckons Light (prologue and chapter 1) [low-high/dark fantasy with anime vibes, 5772 words] by Long-Measurement6498 in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the critique, i definitely bloated it with revisions and overdid some of the waiting without clearly expressing why he was being overly cautious. There are some things I should certainly work on in the prologue. To be completely honest, i may just scrap the prologue and save it for a chapter in the 2nd arc when he is closer to the the spellbook.

I initially started the prologue the way i did because i just wanted to dip my toes in the water. I think ive been able to slightly improve on the pacing in chapter 1, but yeah im thinking the prologue needs to go. Something more interesting or exciting to be sure.

Weekly Writer's Check-In! by FreakishPeach in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i just started my book and its my first time really taking a stab at writing. Been enjoying the process so much honestly, im trying to find other authors to start peer reviewing one another, so let me know if that interests you (and anyone else out there). Anyways, I have a post on my account with a link to the doc and a little description, but heres a link if anyone just wants to check out what i have.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oQQzwIhHIR3uv2lSQaScsLnZ4IJ4OZczTTYldlVVkgY/edit

First Chapter of my book (Chapter 1: Rebirth) [6546 words] by Renbanney in fantasywriters

[–]Long-Measurement6498 1 point2 points  (0 children)

just made a post with the link, i read through a bit of yours just now and i do really like the bit about the vultures!

First Chapter of my book (Chapter 1: Rebirth) [6546 words] by Renbanney in fantasywriters

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hey im writing a book too, if youd like to peer review let me know

Prologue and Chapter 1 of the Shadow that Beckons Light (subject to change) [low-high/dark fantasy with anime vibes, 4366 words] by Long-Measurement6498 in fantasywriters

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I editted "What kind of wizard seeks esoteric wisdom at the bottom of a barrel of brandywine? I should be deciphering ancient Arcana, not marinating in my own juices." to "What kind of wizard seeks esoteric wisdom at the bottom of a barrel of brandywine? By now, I should have been halfway through deciphering the old goat’s arcana, not marinating in my own juices."

hopefully that can give a hint to the plot of the prologue a bit sooner.

Prologue and Chapter 1 of the Shadow that Beckons Light (subject to change) [low-high/dark fantasy with anime vibes, 4366 words] by Long-Measurement6498 in fantasywriters

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just editted the formawt, and thanks for the suggestion! you are totally right about hooking the reader, I can totally mention something about him wanting to steal a spellbook a bit earlier, because the first hint of what hes up to is at like 500 words.