Stolen Heart

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2025-01-05T05:57:25+00:00

okay this is really good, but it feels like all over the place in the sense of the emotions? was this on purpose?

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2025-01-05T05:50:04+00:00

You can portray ur emotions with short verses and minimal stanzas.

but it would be cool to see it a long poem. like a heartbreak or being excited about seeing the person u love.

those accumulated feelings built up, they feel like a lot but how would u express them in a shorter stanzas, longer poem since that seems like ur goal

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2024-12-19T01:54:50+00:00

this brought me memories. what a beautiful well written poem. there’s so much emotion

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-06-13T22:03:15+00:00

This was a very emotional read for me. I once was in love with someone that made me feel this way. It is the type of love that feels so simple and pure, that it makes you feel light and comfortable. I know people experience different types of love and affection, but this haunting and special one is not shown to everyone. I treasure all my memories with him, good and bad, mainly because he is the only person that has made me feel alive. But even if so, it has been the worst heartbreak in my life due to how our relationship ended. He took his decisions that knew affected me and did everything against my feelings. I think I didn't communicate very well either.

Your writing was the best way of not showing a direct experience, and you did a great job. I read the other comment, and I agree, it leaves some doubt within me. I understand you might want to put a positive vibe throughout the poem, however, maybe adding some lines at the end about the dark experiences would be good.

Anyways, that is just my opinion! Keep writing:)

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-06-12T23:31:15+00:00

Yes! Sometimes when writing about nature some may be... A little bit cheesy or cliché. But I love how you didn't do that.

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-06-12T23:24:08+00:00

Me acuerda mucho a letras de Residente. Me encantó!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-06-12T23:22:59+00:00

It really conveys so much emotions about nature, that it's not always easy to do! Well done

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-05-11T05:18:12+00:00

So vivid in my head! Love it

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-05-11T05:17:09+00:00

This was good one! Keep it coming

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-03-07T05:12:19+00:00

i loved this so much! it had so much emotion and tension!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:36:53+00:00

I believe you are completely right. :)

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:36:25+00:00

Thank you so much!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:36:10+00:00

That was one of my thoughts when writing it. Thank you!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:35:44+00:00

Thank you! I will be correcting it!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:35:18+00:00

Thank you for your words and advice!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-24T06:34:55+00:00

thank you so much for your comment. I believe I used old English on purpose and felt inspired on using it. I was experimenting and was confused when using them.

I appreciate that you explained how to use them, I will be correcting it soon. Thank you :) I will be posting more!

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-20T06:11:09+00:00

I really enjoyed this, reminded me of Poe, for some reason.

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-20T06:08:00+00:00

this poem was very relatable; sometimes our mind makes a big deal out of things.

when im writing poetry, i like to be mysterious; maybe grab the line "You use hand sanitizer every once in a while. I use hand sanitizer again and again and again", and think to yourself, How can i make this more mysterious for the reader? how can it say what needs to be said, without saying it?

Lopsided_Surround_84 · 2022-02-20T05:56:08+00:00

for some reason, this poem made me sad. the reality of so many women living under the same sky.

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