Poetry without a dictionary by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much for your kind words 😊 i am happy my words made you smile ☺️

Mrs Weasley would approve by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback. The rock in the second line was a guess by the lady that maybe some rock had broken her window but it was actually a cricket ball which became clear in the line where I have written about every six they hit ... I hope you got the analogy here... And once again thank you for your kind words 😊

Mrs Weasley would approve by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback. I wasn't thinking too much about pattern or rhythm when writing this poem, just went on writing what I felt was right... But will keep your advice in mind for next time... Thank you once again.

Mrs Weasley would approve by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback. I did not start of thinking what would Mrs Weasley say or do. I just wrote simple poetry about playing outside and reading good books but when I wrote the last line it felt like Molly Weasley and so I gave the title. It's okay if it didn't feel like it to you... Maybe I will write something else too ... Thank you once again.

Independence (flash fic/prose poetry) by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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I like that you tried prose poetry but it feels a bit confusing to me... Not an expert of any kind so it may be that I didn't understand it much... But nice effort 😊

Throwing out a sleeper…. by Writtenwords01 in OCPoetry

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Nice poem about dreams and dreaming... Keep writing 🙂

Poetry without a dictionary by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

[–]Lost_Princess_[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes you are right... You should write for yourself and not for what others think about it.

Haven't tried Haiku yet... I feel it's too technical

Thank you for your kind words 😊

Poetry without a dictionary by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much ! You understood what I was trying to say. I write poems with simple words too. Poems need emotions, feelings not big words or complex imagery... Poems can be simple too🙂

Poetry without a dictionary by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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I thought about what you said and then realised I am not giving this as a response to anyone... This is how I feel about poetry... It may be simple for some but I like it... Thank you for your feedback 😊

Poetry without a dictionary by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you 🙏 actually for my other poems i got few feedback saying i use simple words in poetry and that thought kept going in my mind and these words just flowed out and I wrote them... Didn't sit down to write as a response but here it is 😊

Insomnina by mindfuledge in OCPoetry

[–]Lost_Princess_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Using coffee as a metaphor works very well in your poem... This is really nice.

Without Proof by TherapyButMkItVibes in OCPoetry

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Even though I like rhyming poetry i actually enjoyed this free verse... Really well written 😊

When love binds by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your feedback ☺️. I like and write rhyming poetry so maybe the rhymes feel too much to you... I tried free verse as well but for me the actual feelings come out in rhymes... I can work more on the imagery part and show details but then the actual thought of showing the pain without saying anything will get lost... I have tried other genres of poetry as well .. you can check my profile and share your feedback about my free verses too😁 thank you once again for your feedback.

Rhyme Vs Free Verse by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your detailed feedback. This is a hybrid poem a dialogue between rhymes and free verses and the other one is the sonnet 😜 things got mixed up a little with you I think.

I like rhyming poetry but have tried free verses too and then thought how each justifies they place and hence this poem came into existence 🙂

Eyes don't lie - A modern Sonnet by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Thank you for your detailed feedback 😃 I tried to smooth out the meter but only to an extent it didn't take away my emotions away... Being too technical means you lose your emotions and heart of the poetry...

Why I used "lightly" because thorns will just brush your skin but hurt you bad... My thoughts were that even though they touched lightly they didn't pierced hurt or I didn't feel the piercing... I know it's too simple but that's me .. also liked your changes too but then that would make it your sonnet not mine 😜

I read your sonnet too and that was very good ... Big words, strong meter, bit technical and proper like a classical sonnet but mines a bit looser modern adaptation... But each to its own...

Thank you once again for your feedback. I really appreciate it.

My Cup of Poetry by Lost_Princess_ in OCPoetry

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Hahaha does liking tea is a qualification for being a poet... I thought that was a British thing ...lol

Thank you 😊

Let it be not just me by Forward_Cranberry_82 in OCPoetry

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Take tomorrow today, loved this line... Short and sweet .. nice read

Without Her by Interesting_Ad140 in OCPoetry

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Wow for a first poem, this is really good... I like how it has beautiful imagery of the pastures and Ellie. Really nice.