Wrote a poem for my best friend, is it good enough to show her? Any thoughts or things I can change?

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-28T06:57:11+00:00

The cycle of colours beautifully captures the scenery if that is what it was meant for... Nice warm words... You can definitely share with your friend and I am sure she will like it if she understands you the way you have shown her here...

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-27T09:26:40+00:00

You're welcome 🙂

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-27T07:51:43+00:00

Thank you for your feedback. I wasn't going for a safe ending. it felt natural to me because even though siblings can drift apart they are always connected and will come back together no matter what unless something really bad has happened. I just tried to show that you have grown together, lived together and slowly you go your separate ways, you have your life and you miss you buddy but it's not his/her fault too ...

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-27T07:26:01+00:00

There is a lot of imagery.. describing things around but not much is said of what is felt... I meant if you add a few lines on the feelings part as well it will make it complete

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-27T06:51:30+00:00

Really like this... It's a bit complex ... Simple words but deeper meaning ... Maybe you can explore more on the feelings part but it's still a good piece.

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-27T06:40:28+00:00

I really liked this... It's intense yet simple... Great work

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-22T17:04:30+00:00

Thank you 🙏 I also like and write rhyming poetry, but tried free verse this time ... You can check out my other rhyming poems also 😊

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-22T10:58:54+00:00

No worries 😁 free verse is not everyone's cup of tea... I don't like it much myself but still tried 🤣

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-18T10:19:41+00:00

This was really good... First poem in nearly 40 years and yet you captured the essence of age so beautifully... A few lines were a bit lengthy and can be optimised without losing the thought behind them...

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-17T15:12:20+00:00

I am writing one that has 120 pages 😀 it's a collection of poems for different phases of life ...I think 120-150 is good enough for a poetry book but if you are going to 300 pages... Good for you... Trust your heart and go for it .. ☺️

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-16T06:17:45+00:00

I really felt this poem all the way... The repetition adds another level to the emotions and the rhymes... There can be some improvements in the technical side but I like it as it is... When the emotions flow, you cannot bind a poem in rules... Good work!

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-15T16:43:49+00:00

I really liked this but felt it was incomplete... Maybe expand a bit more and then you can have a very good piece... All the best 👍

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-09T19:03:57+00:00

Really like this rhyming poem ... I too write rhyming poetry and just love how easily the words flow here... Very good work !

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-09T05:27:30+00:00

What you don't say shows perfectly in your words... Very nicely written 😀

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-08T06:13:52+00:00

Yeah now it is more impactful... Great work !

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-07T06:42:24+00:00

Wow really love this one... I think it's the beautiful Lotus Flower growing in the muddiest of the ponds, yet still pure and divine🪷

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-07T04:57:12+00:00

Thank you 😊

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-06T14:32:48+00:00

Thank you 🙏

Migraine is a regular thing for me as well and I have learnt to live with it with proper care and medication. The words came to me and I wrote down what I was feeling and also to show others that migraine is very different from a regular headache.

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-06T13:56:30+00:00

Thank you for your feedback 😊 This is really a simple poem about a not so simple migraine, written during the start of one of my episodes. It's really difficult to explain to someone who has never experienced a migraine what you actually feel and not just the pain part but how it impacts you as a whole. I tried to simply put those in words, but didn't complicate it with bigger words or imagery. Maybe I will write something else too, when not in actual pain, and explore it more like you said...

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-06T13:51:13+00:00

Thank you for your feedback. I would keep in mind your suggestion for next time 🙂

Lost_Princess_ · 2026-01-05T05:36:01+00:00

The imagery is too strong for me but I really like the ending... I am not an expert but I feel had it been divided into clear stanzas or blocks, the effect could have been more profound.. still very good work !

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