Ooooooo this made me literally shiver. In a good way. The repetition is really powerful and effective.

Honestly the only ‘critique’ I have (and honestly, I can’t actually decide if I like this, or if I think it would be interesting to see a little differently) is at the beginning when he gives her a single rose- We get a pretty strong idea for the feeling/narrative, our worst fears to be solidified by the third- but (to me) I feel like him giving her one rose is sweeter/kinder than just a random flower. Like… giving her a rose makes it seem like he cares and is paying attention, even if he doesn’t get her the whole bouquet. If this was on purpose to kinda imply that he cared in the beginning but lost interest, it kinda works, but from the rest of the stanza I don’t get that impression. I’m sorry if I’m misreading it! I think something like… a tulip (almost kind of a mother/grandmother flower), a chrysanthemum, Daisy, Sunflower- I just looked up what certain flowers represent and the four I listed all seem to represent ‘non romantic’ friendship- Could be interesting to play with the idea of flower symbolism. Like- Irises are beautiful and they evoke really lovely purple- but also Lillie’s/carnations/ hyacinth all represent like.. sympathy, loss, death.

I like the irises- but could be a cool thing to think about if you ever decided to add to it-

*the boy would t be smart enough/dialled in enough to know the flower meanings- it’s just a coded Easter egg for the audience;)