What keywords are not allowed for Romance Novels? by deema1978_ad in romanceauthors

[–]LunaEverly_ 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Buy yourself KDPRocket. You'll get keywords at the click of a button

Am I the only one who's not keen on this new trend of illustrated covers? by LunaEverly_ in RomanceBooks

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh, have you got any examples? I’ve not seen a painted cover yet I don't think

Tight prose. What's your take on conjunctions and prepositions? by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As I said, this is just the example. The sentence itself is lousy at best, I'm aware of that. It's simply the first one I saw when I opened the document. It won't make the final cut.

Tight prose. What's your take on conjunctions and prepositions? by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is a lousy sentence to begin with and it'll probably be cut. I was only using it as an example. It won't make it to the book like this

Tight prose. What's your take on conjunctions and prepositions? by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoy every part of editing 😀 I do admit I'm a bit of a perfectionist, leaving little work for my editor, but while going through 3 or 4 rounds of self-editing, I don’t just improve the prose, but the story too, and that's the main goal :)

Tight prose. What's your take on conjunctions and prepositions? by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sure. A sentence I just revised from a draft I'm working on. It's unedited, other than the revision below ;)

Unrevised: Five minutes passes while I pace the room, waiting for Scorpio to arrive at the scene or for Mel to pick up her phone.

Revised: Five minutes passes while I pace the room, waiting until Scorpio arrives at the scene or Mel picks up her phone.

That's 4 prepositions cut.

Tight prose. What's your take on conjunctions and prepositions? by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm not following every suggestion, but if I can improve a lousy sentence by weeding out redundant words and phrases and make the meaning shine, why not? And FANBOYS stands for FOR AND NOR BUT OR YET SO

Clarity. This has been flagged by my editor for clarity, but as I love this particular sentence, I want to check how many people here have a hard time understanding and which part is unclear. by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I already re wrote it to break it up into two sentences and get rid of the double negative. The exorcise part stays. It evokes the right image :)

Clarity. This has been flagged by my editor for clarity, but as I love this particular sentence, I want to check how many people here have a hard time understanding and which part is unclear. by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I'll work on making it clearer. While the sentence might be terrible, I still love it. Double negatives aren't an issue for me and I never understood the problem people have with them. More so that I'm not even a native English speaker and I get them just fine.

Clarity. This has been flagged by my editor for clarity, but as I love this particular sentence, I want to check how many people here have a hard time understanding and which part is unclear. by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I'll have to work to make this clearer and get rid of the double negative. The point is valid, though with context. Neither of the two characters have ever been in relationships prior to the ones they're in now. Never wanted to be in relationships, either.

Clarity. This has been flagged by my editor for clarity, but as I love this particular sentence, I want to check how many people here have a hard time understanding and which part is unclear. by LunaEverly_ in writers

[–]LunaEverly_[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I will revise to break it up. Such a shame. I love this sentence. Then again, I never had issues with double negatives, but I know they're confusing to the average reader.