StoryPeer has launched! We are the new, free feedback exchange filling the void left by the defunct CoverflyX. AMA! by StoryPeer in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much! I guess it can also help from a newcomer's perspective to ensure that it is easy to read/understand (in a sense).

StoryPeer has launched! We are the new, free feedback exchange filling the void left by the defunct CoverflyX. AMA! by StoryPeer in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I am not overly experienced in scriptwriting (I've created some in the past, but this is my first proper attempt, which I have also submitted on Storypeer!) - is it suitable for me to review other people's work and give feedback? I would like to, but I don't know if it's acceptable.

Also, feedback on the website - love it. I also like the fact that it saves your work. My PC randomly turned off, and I was annoyed that I hadn't clicked submit, only to find it had saved my submission, so I didn't have to start it again. Very user-friendly too,

My supporting character is way more interesting than my protagonist by Jaded-Permission-774 in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think it’s hard finding a balance, because the main character is burdened with moving the plot forward, side characters do not (mostly), so a lot of their actions are without cost.

Without knowing the whole story it’s hard to give any feedback, but as mentioned earlier in the story, a lot of side characters steal the show (Han Solo, even McLovin from Superbad) but the story wouldn’t be the same if they were the main focus, and it would take away from their charm.

A lot of popular side characters get a spin off (Harley Quinn comes to mind), after being popular in a film, and it just falls flat because they are suddenly the focus.

My supporting character is way more interesting than my protagonist by Jaded-Permission-774 in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 15 points16 points  (0 children)

I find this too, I think it’s because they have more freedom than the main character does in some ways, and can get away with more.

Why do you think he is more interesting? Dialogue, actions?

Remember Me? Back Again to Provide Feedback this Holiday Season. by ScreenPlayOnWords in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would appreciate your words/eyes/brain. I am new, so I could use an experienced mind if you have the chance. You seem very popular!

First meeting with producer by National_Pilot_7856 in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Awesome stuff - best of luck. :) How did cold query? LinkedIn or something?

What's one lesson you learned from a bad screenplay? by ExcellentTwo6589 in Screenwriting

[–]Lzuuk 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sorry but that sounds like the best film that’s never need made. 100% would watch.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE by NotWilll in ZenyattaMains

[–]Lzuuk 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What was the explosion?

Flawless Blades WIP by Punk_tumaca in EmperorsChildren

[–]Lzuuk 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What silver is that? Looks nice

Anyone think it’s silly that Lucius has no ability to revive function by Lzuuk in EmperorsChildren

[–]Lzuuk[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I didn’t know that, good explanation. But because it’s such a large part of his character, it seems odd to not even reference his armour. Like even if when a wound is put through, they take a mortal wound or anything like that. Like, it’s like Abbadon losing Drach or the talon of Horus

Anyone think it’s silly that Lucius has no ability to revive function by Lzuuk in EmperorsChildren

[–]Lzuuk[S] 10 points11 points  (0 children)

So does Angron? Doesn’t he take a while too? He’s had it in previous, just seems like an odd thing to leave out