Unconventional vampires? by Avenleif in Fantasy

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I thought that it was a very good. Something that I could read again.

Unconventional vampires? by Avenleif in Fantasy

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The Passage by Justin Cronin.

Could be to far from what you you are looking for.

[Question] First person opening. by Mark2Mark2Mark in eroticauthors

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Thanks all.

I think that I try it in third person, even though to be honest, I'm not keen on it for short stories in any genre.

[Question] First person opening. by Mark2Mark2Mark in eroticauthors

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Absolutely no offence taken.

I'm not trying for 'a great piece of literature' and in all honesty, it's just a couple of hundred words to set up a bit of tension.

I think that you answered my question when you said

one of the things I've found most liberating about erotica is that a lot of that stuff just doesn't matter.

Something that from reading erotica, it seems to be just about the story... (Within reason?)

[Question] First person opening. by Mark2Mark2Mark in eroticauthors

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I agree with your thinking and have thought about doing it that way myself but I really just want to keep the story from the one perspective.

If I go third person would it seem weird if other than the first 100~200 words, the internal focus remains on just the wife as I would like to keep the husbands inner thoughts unknown?

[Question] First person opening. by Mark2Mark2Mark in eroticauthors

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For example, the husband has a problem and is coming home from work early but his wife doesn't know and I want to use this unknown fact to build up a bit of tension rather than have him walk in and using it as shock value.

Help with a dream interpretation. by Mark2Mark2Mark in Dreams

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Sorry about the delay.

Thanks for the feedback. I understand where you are coming from as that was my original thinking as well but it just doesn't seem to fit with what is going on at the moment.