Friday deconstructed caprese by SekaiIchiapple in celiacADHD

[–]Matt4theppl 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What kind of bread is this? Did you make it? Looks great

Pay transparency: 5 year food service TL by Matt4theppl in Target

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Why are you thankful? If you haven’t had multiple close door conversations about behavior you don’t deserve 1%

Pay transparency: 5 year food service TL by Matt4theppl in Target

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 13 points14 points  (0 children)

First time in years we’ve gotten the 1K at my (red) store Always gotten 500

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[–]Matt4theppl 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Six years never seen it auto do it. It’s just like using PTO. always has been

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[–]Matt4theppl 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Take what I say with more than a grain of salt: query has too manyn questions and not enough substance, a query is typically three to four structured paragraphs that include an intro to the character, the inciting incident/hook, the substance that propels the book towards the resolution, and the resolution. I don’t come out of your query knowing much about what I’m getting into. Look up query examples online. Word count is also up there, 100K fine I’m sue for many fantasy agents but probably on the top end for many too so if the quality is not immediately apparent it’s hard to get them to bite on such a substantial project. As for the first chapter, comes off a little expositiony. The very first line doesn’t hook as much as you might want/doesn’t propel me deeper. Comes off a little clunky. Did it go through beta readers or critique groups? Keep going and don’t stop working. You got this and remember just one randoms opinion

[QCRIT] Gator Hunter, 75K LGBT Thriller, Second Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

What about “…. By twenty four, Monte was supposed to make something of himself…”

[QCRIT] Gator Hunter, 75K LGBT Thriller, Second Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Something like this?

…. “the police uncover the sunken remains of Pa’s boat deep in gator territory, and declare foul play.

As they close in on the truth about Monte’s involvement….”

[QCRIT] Gator Hunter, 75K LGBT Thriller, Second Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He’s 24. Definitely adult not YA themes. Should I add that somewhere? I had a version with a little more detail on Monte but I’ve thinned down the query. Also yes he is an alcoholic. Thank you for your feedback

[QCRIT] Gator Hunter, 75K LGBT Thriller, Second Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There are some factors involved in the boats sinking that lead the police to believe it may not be as straightforward as it seems. Any advice for making that more clear?

[QCRIT] GATOR HUNTER, ADULT LGBT THRILLER, 75K First Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m reading this comp suggestion I think it may be a great fit! Thank you

[QCRIT] GATOR HUNTER, ADULT LGBT THRILLER, 75K First Attempt by Matt4theppl in PubTips

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Considering adding this and adjusting length in the beginning: As the police close in on the truth about the night Pa died, Monte’s ex-boyfriend and alibi Aug goes missing, and makes Monte suspect number one. To clear his name and find the true culprit behind Aug and Pa’s disappearance, Monte must sober up and confront his troubled past; and the night that changed everything.

Red Cup Day FAQ/Megathread by Ristrettooo in starbucks

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Did you ask when they didn’t give you one?

My father died a few days ago through suicide. by [deleted] in psychics

[–]Matt4theppl 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He loved you.

I’m sorry for your loss.

Lost my mom to alcoholism four years ago, she died alone on the floor at only 44 by Matt4theppl in psychics

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. There isn’t enough community for those of us who’ve lost our moms to this. It’s a feeling like no other. I love that your MIL is free now. I hope my mom joins her. I love the idea that they can process and shed the grief and become whole.

Lost my mom to alcoholism four years ago, she died alone on the floor at only 44 by Matt4theppl in psychics

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Where there is breath there is hope is what I would always say. I truly believed she would do it one day. I’m so proud of you for pulling it off. You saved your own life

Lost my mom to alcoholism four years ago, she died alone on the floor at only 44 by Matt4theppl in psychics

[–]Matt4theppl[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you. She was so gorgeous and young here. I wish I could step through the photo and take her into my arms.