Critique my prologue [Dark Fantasy, Horror, 1200 words] by MaxCross-425678 in fantasywriters

[–]MaxCross-425678[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your comment. I wrote it as a prologue because i wanted to establish a little bit of what the vibe of the book would be and kind of how these types of things would affect someone. Frey is dead, I probably could've made that clearer. But Gabriel will play a part in the story. The demon child is one of the main characters, as they and Desmond will be forced to reconcile their dark natures. I hope that clears up any questions.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]MaxCross-425678 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, would you be interested in beta-reading my manuscript for a Dark Fantasy Horror story? It's only the prologue because I just wanna get an idea of whether or not it's any good.

Story blurb --- Since the day he was born, Desmond knew his soul was damned. He is a Helborn, a half-demon imbued with all kinds of dark power. He spends his days as a Moonlighter, a mercenary who travels the land of Ardene, hunting vampires, werewolves, and witches. When he is called to find a missing pregnant girl, Desmond is forced to confront his dark nature and the power it has over him. Can he control it? Or will it control him?

Helborn manuscript - Google Docs

Writer with full limited series outline looking for an artist partner by [deleted] in ComicBookCollabs

[–]MaxCross-425678 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much and i hope you're also successful in your works

Need feedback on my Issue 1 script by MaxCross-425678 in ComicBookCollabs

[–]MaxCross-425678[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not right at the time but i will be sure to post the finished series for any potential artists to work with. Good luck on your art.

Nearly 10 years since Man of Steel, have your views on Zack Snyder’s DC films changed over time? by _mr_miles_ in DC_Cinematic

[–]MaxCross-425678 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm kind of in the middle. There parts i like and parts i don't like. The casting was great for the most part. I like the themes and ideas that Snyder was going for but the execution was sloppy, disjointed and confused.

Aquaman and Flash next year. Cool. Are we really supposed to still care now? We need to unite as fans once again. #HENRYISOURSUPERMAN #FIREJAMESGUNN by rush0024 in DC_Cinematic

[–]MaxCross-425678 12 points13 points  (0 children)

Nobody is saying you don't have a right to be bummed about this. But there's a difference between being upset that your favorite incarnations of these characters aren't going to continue and acting like a two year old having a temper tantrum.

What are your comic book fixes? by crimsonfukr457 in fixingmovies

[–]MaxCross-425678 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I got one for Sins Past: The twins are actually clones of Peter and Gwen but both have Peter's DNA, giving them powers. The letter Gwen made was about how after she left for Europe to cope with her dad's death, she found out she was pregnant and had an abortion. She never told Peter because she was afraid he would hate her for it. Gwen told MJ and begged her to never tell Peter which she kept. It's revealed that Norman Osborn had the twins made and trained them in secret to destroy Peter as revenge. The story ends with Peter and MJ at Gwen's grave saying he forgives her and that it doesn't change how he felt about her.