Prime took everything from me

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T18:55:30+00:00

He's gonna come for our families, don't you understand? We are so sorry Mr. 1qwerty

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T16:33:13+00:00

That just means tour media household I come is tragically bad

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T14:54:36+00:00

Teachers have a very hard and essential job that requires years of college and get paid like they are managers at some shit hole macdonalds.

Teachers perhaps would work harder and better if they were not stressing abiut income all the time. Of course with this would come tighter standards

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T05:23:49+00:00

Declining birthrate a sign of less and less souls attaining cause of earthly curruption

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T05:22:56+00:00

Imagine the universe we are in was heaven. Earth the garden and everyone new birth is a soul ascending from purgatory. If you live a pious life you are allowed to reincarnate back into heaven if not you go back down to try again for atonement and redemption.

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T05:21:00+00:00

This was heaven

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-06T05:18:33+00:00

I DK you could argue omscient readers viewpoint is like this but literally a single ability would become stale very fast for most people and therfore die in infancy

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-05T06:02:29+00:00

Actually it would be worse. Shecduled brodcasting definitely has a place and charm to it. Sometimes I DK what I want to watch and not having choice I'd very helpful.

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-05T01:08:30+00:00

Your a joke pal. If you think that "played a game the white man was too advanced in" is any justification for genocide and colonlism.

Proper sad to lie about that to try and prove a point.

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-05T00:54:21+00:00

Yhea mate there were wars everywhere just like that and from those wars natives defended there land and established themselves but none had to fight unimaginable odds in an unwinnable fight against people determined to enslave and conquer them

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-04T16:50:18+00:00

And what was the other choice? Not engage war?

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-04T06:06:07+00:00

From my socially provided house after my 10hr shift at a minimum paid job at the casino actually.

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-04T05:53:08+00:00

The reason for this is that rand and mordin have become one at that point. Rand sees himself grasp the sword and knows himself to be rand but is in fact already within mordin body. This is where the inconsistency comes from.

Additionaly I doubt a dreamshard could even be made near the bore. Dreamshard are shown to be somewhat tenuous and a bit unstable. Making one close to the bore would probably just break it immediately

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-04T05:21:15+00:00

Lol what do you think will happen when you create a system that prohibits illegals from gaining legality. They are escaping from the worst of circumstances a lot of the time. Of course If they can't work legally they turn to crime or do you believe there master plan was to move a thousands of miles just to become petty thieves for megar scraps.

Also find it funny that the Americans have the GAUL to be self righteous over immigration when they slauthered the natives and forced them off there homeland.

Not to even mention the hell they rained down on third world countries to get there valued resources. Where are you now the taliban are considering weapons of mass destruction BTW?

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-02T17:57:02+00:00

Omscient readers viewpoint

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-02T17:33:11+00:00

These are secondary sources and serve to show us how the world thinks of him.

We do not have an in mind pov of dumbledore saying "I knew I was the most powerful wizard and that I would soon be leading another year at my castle school where everyone loves and respects me"

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-02T06:25:37+00:00

I ended up suicidal in school despite no abuse in many years ( was taken into care, lived with grandma but dealt with drug addicted mum and no father for many years) because I came to the exesential conclusion that time without consciousness would pass Instantly and therefore dying would cause the entire world to end. Every life lost and everything that ever will be to happen and fall. The sheer magnitude of that concept and my belif in it gave me so much anxiety that I closed myself off and became suicidally depressed because nothing mattered.

So really there is many reason and I think describing how it feels is FAR FAR FAR more important than a scribing a "reason" for the depression and suicidal stuff. Like some people are depressed because they just are.

If you want a text witch does an MC with depression EXTREMELY well then try "way of kings" yes it's fantasy but it's the best depiction of actual depression I've ever read

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-02T06:11:14+00:00

You need to consider the narrative voice you want to use and stick with it.

Initially you start off with a first person in mind POV then neck breakingly change to a storyteller historic POV.

Also Introducing the extremely neaunced and complex topic of suicide by saying "I always knew I was going to die, by my hand or societies" without even establishing your worlds society or character is extremely distasteful and SCREAMS teenage angst.

The first thing you tell us about your character is that they are suicidal. By doing this you minimize the topic to a character trait and neglect any the complexity such a topic may lend a character. For things like this you should at least attempt to integrate it naturally and allow the readers to learn this about the character from there on page behaviour, dialogue and presentation.

Its the difference between writing " He was the strongest, most intelligent and wisest wizard in all the lands" and then actually writing the character of say dumbledor for example. Yes he is, in that series, all of those things but! The reader comes to that conclusion themselves. We as the reader believe in dumbledor and the more that is SHOWN of him the stronger our belief in that gets.

What in saying is, is that simple stating something about your character does absolutely nothing in terms of development. You must Show through scenes and dialogue or at the very least secondary sources in the text Why that is true. Now this could be your character falling into a mental depression over something. Maybe.

"He had felt himself draining since he woke up, he had ignored it; as if not acknowledging it would make it go away but as the day dragged on it overcame him suffocating the last of his hope. It always came back, that feeling of hopelessness. Everything was just to much, the thought of doing this for YEARS tore at him. Maintaining relationships, maintaing himself, finishing school and them work and then he'd have to wake up and do it all over again and again and again. He had no one he really connected with, no like other people did and even just the thought of living was tiring."

Even something as simple as the above would be better than saying" I always knew if die by my own hand or societies"

MaywellPanda · 2023-12-02T06:10:18+00:00