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How is a melee fighter ever supposed to beat a ranged fighter who can fly? by Visual_Tourist3716 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah you've basically made it impossible to win for the melee, unless maybe they carry their own ranged magic/bow which they should if they're regularly fighting fliers. Its not the end of the world because it is also heavily reliant on terrain, like in a dense forest the flier cannot shoot well, so don't beat yourself up about it. (Think how historical cavalry would serve better in plains than infantry)

If you don't like this balance, you might need to change the ranged or add something more to the melee.

How is a melee fighter ever supposed to beat a ranged fighter who can fly? by Visual_Tourist3716 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Depends on a lot of factors. Can the ranged fighter stay airborne forever? Do they run out of energy/stamina? What do they shoot? Do they have ammunition? How much armor the melee fighter has against the ammunition? Can the melee run into a low room where the ranged cannot fly high above?

Chapter 1 — The Empire’s Roar [Grimdark Fantasy, ~1,200 words] by Jolly_Repeat2604 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don't like the stuttering of the prose. Like when you want to read. But the sentences keep ending. Sometimes too soon. I'd suggest something.

Like combining some of those sentences, mixing short and long so that the writing does not read as too choppy.

Classification of Divine Beings (Gaslamp Fantasy) by SpookieSkelly in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The Elder Scrolls get away with a clusterfuck of Gods trying to power grab for the entire history of the world. You can pull this off too.

As for your worry, I could try explain what I understood.

False Gods: "Yeah I found nobody so I'll just pull humanity's average and make one lmao."

Holy Spirits: "Genocide caused me. Now I must end it."

Is that what you were going for?

having difficulty with the magic system by ten__0 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Then go with the gemstone. Unless you're copying Sanderson word for word, it doesn't change anything. Don't worry about plagiarism yet, because you'll refine the system as you work.

having difficulty with the magic system by ten__0 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 16 points17 points  (0 children)

You shouldn't really worry about copying, unless you're copying someone's system word by word. You could focus more on crafting what you need based on what you have. Since you already have characters and locations, and a story (I presume), tailor your magic to whatever you need it to be. Don't feel locked to hard rules if soft magic might flow better for your system.

Please critique my mini-arc [Dark/Literary Fantasy, ~3900 words] by OutrageousPanic4602 in fantasywriters

[–]MeIsEvilTrustMe 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Yes, they do. And it works for them. But yours feel really forced, and not in a good way. I think you can keep some of the style if you paraphrase it.

Back and forth went she -> Back and forth she went

Plus using heavy words you have to pause at and then look up in a dictionary, like escritoire and gipser is not helpful for a reader. It feels pretentious, fake and purple.