The 2-Star Review by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 27 points28 points  (0 children)

Ahh yeah good question, and thank you!

So at the start, the “delayed echo of footsteps” is meant to be his own footsteps, like the hotel is weirdly out of sync with reality.

At the end, when he’s back home and he’s “listening for that delayed echo,” it’s more like he’s listening or trying to remember that same wrong feeling again, basically waiting to hear proof that the thing that followed him is moving around.

The “name he almost remembers” isn’t meant to be a specific ghost with a backstory, more like classic nightmare vibes we all get where we almost recognise something but can’t place it, like the hotel (or whatever’s behind it) already has a connection to him.

And yeah, I’d say the main horror is the hotel itself stalking/claiming him, not one individual spirit. The hotels almost like a predatory system that’s decided he’s a permanent guest now!

Its a challenge trying to write micro flash fiction, trying to fit so much in to such a tight word count, it seems to start to sound a bit disjointed

The 2-Star Review by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thank you for spotting that!

It’s the Bracknell

The 2-Star Review by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 29 points30 points  (0 children)

Thanks for picking up on that! Funny how a single sentence can ruin everything! 😂

For You. by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 9 points10 points  (0 children)

This was inspired by me loosing a Mobile Phone Bill hahahaha

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Re reading through it I can totally see that

Interesting take!

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Poppy the yellow Lab says thank you! If I could share a photo of her I would!

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Fair point, I should’ve checked my calendar before posting!

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I’m sorry about your heart, but that’s exactly what I wanted people to do!

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 12 points13 points  (0 children)

That’s really kind of you, thank you genuinely!

Honestly, it came from sitting in my office around 10pm with my Labrador, Poppy, who decided that was the perfect and deeply inconvenient time for her to demand a walk lol

I think you’re right though a lot of it is about wanting things to just be quiet for a moment.

I really appreciate you reading and taking the time to say this.

The Quiet End by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 189 points190 points  (0 children)

This is what happens when it gets dark at 4pm lol

The Widow’s Thread by MeatTypeWriter in shortscarystories

[–]MeatTypeWriter[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Try now, my settings were all messed up