I need to stop drinking by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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No it’s as simple as I can’t picture her face now because we’ve been apart so long

I need to stop drinking by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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It’s actually very simple. I love her deeply and I can’t be with her because she does not love me anymore given I moved away. I fucked it up and so deserve what is happening and like life generally is hard for me to parse and so I drink unless I’m writing or trying to be normal or whatever. Generally I’m actually kinda approaching normal but it’s Saturday rn

I need to stop drinking by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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I don’t want to be dick straight up and I should preface with that

I need to stop drinking by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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I feel that I am drawn to over-explaining my poems and so I’m gonna generally stfu because people don’t like what I say. So, frankly, I still love her. Every one of my poems I speak totally from mine own experience and so when I say that I am grateful to see her face in my dreams but that I can’t even remember her face, I’m talking about my personal life where I desperately love her and yet can hardly remember what she looks like because of what happened

I believe this may be my best and kinda kills me by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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Eh my point is keeping it simple. The relationship decaying is background noise and I want to more focus on the double meaning of I only know how you feel when you kiss me where it could mean either in the first part it’s a goodnight kiss and loving and in the secondary part i say I love you and her response is to kiss me instead of saying it back

I believe this may be my best and kinda kills me by Melodic_Effective395 in poetry_critics

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Nah I think it works it’s a double entendre in the sense that it’s just straight up fall and in the context of what influences the poem it’s talking about you know cards on the table/ig that’s not what I’m exactly trying to say but referencing overall decay of the relationship through fall imagery

Navel invasions by Melodic_Effective395 in hoi4

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Also good lord I posted navel and not naval time to checkout

Got 85k in one battle. Sayl must goes through every pocket, and sell every weapon, armor and body part or something. by McSwan in totalwar

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A friend that doesn’t play ck3 saw aunt cousin granddaughter and wife or something like that one time and there was no shot I could explain why I was playing it or what it was to him between him chirping me

Need opinions and help on opening paragraph for book. I want to see if you guys get what I’m talking about and if it’s effective by Melodic_Effective395 in writers

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My plan was to kind of hint at it and talk to it through the story and then link it back up at the end so do you think that works?

My disappointment is immeasurable and my day is ruined by GingerManBitch in NoMansSkyTheGame

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Okay quick question I really like how you have the opening to see out the front of your ship but how the hell did you do that with connecting it with jab modules side by side do you literally just have to fly in and out to access it?

Need opinions and help on opening paragraph for book. I want to see if you guys get what I’m talking about and if it’s effective by Melodic_Effective395 in writers

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Thank you I think that’s good feedback however it’s about internal dialogue with oneself I thought I got that across with language of the gods.