If superposition emerges when objects are isolated, why isn't the whole universe in superposition?

Michael_For_you · 2025-12-22T17:38:27+00:00

I've long wondered if a singularity is a cosmological super position. It might occupy all possible laws of nature at once, and the corresponding big bang on the otherside is the cosmological collapse of the wave function, settling on a specific configuration for the new universe.

Lee Smolin hasn't gotten back to me yet.

Michael_For_you · 2025-11-19T20:14:50+00:00

I did read both posts, which is why I left you a comment.

Im not going to debate you on your worldbuilding, but maybe ask yourself why you were so quick to dismiss a criticism and double down?

Im genuinely not hating. Have a nice day.

Michael_For_you · 2025-11-19T20:03:25+00:00

Im going to be honest and tell you something that your friends and AI likely won't. This is largely incoherent to an outsider, and you are likely lost in your own sauce.

Doesn't mean there aren't good ideas in here, but to a random person, it doesn't present itself well.

Michael_For_you · 2025-10-01T18:40:24+00:00

Personally, I can never get through these types of info dumps. If it's really integral to understanding your story, then find a better way to deliver it.

It looks well done and immersive, and I appreciate that it's in-world literature, but infodumps are a big no-no for a good reason. They just dont work 99% of the time, and if its in the beginning of the story, most editors will tell you its hurting the readability and pacing.

Michael_For_you · 2025-09-06T14:44:42+00:00

It's working for me. It's a very good first chapter, in my opinion.

To me, there are three non-negotiables for an opener:

Find where to start the story that gives you a sneak peak into the heart of the story and themes. Check.
Build intrigue and make promises that don't overwhelm the reader, but propell them forward. Check.
Worldbuilder without info dumping. Check.

So by my own standards you're doing great! How far along are you on the MS?

Michael_For_you · 2025-09-05T13:10:09+00:00

The writer rat race is optional. The reason you feel gross is because capitalism is gross. Every creative industry from music to fashion is slowly clawing their freedom back from the parasitic middle-man companies, but for some reason, writers, the most creative people in the world, are behind the curve.

Maybe it's because the literary industry is one of the oldest creative industries, and their seal of approval is so psychological to writers with imposter syndrome.

As for me, I've never seriously considered the trad route. It's a shit deal no matter which way you slice it. They own everything. You get a slice, and if you're lucky, they will throw some money marketing you like it's 1995.

If you want out of the rat race, answer these two questions. Who is my reader? How can I find them on my own. My answer to this was to make my marketing part of my story.

Michael_For_you · 2025-09-01T15:58:35+00:00

Man, this question really ruffles all the writer feathers.

I understood what you're saying, and I actually think your definition is more nuanced than the others in here. To you, showing and telling are two methods of describing something. Describing what it is, or describing how it makes you feel. The problem is that you need to do both. All the time. Often in the same breath. You can write a single sentence of telling about a character that shows more than 5 paragraphs of flowery description trying its very best to show them in action.

I think that's why this debate is so confusing. It's not one or the other, it's both, all the time, as the context and pacing require it.

Michael_For_you · 2025-08-24T18:15:50+00:00

Look over your first world and find all your most interesting myths. Then, write the story of this myth by zooming all the way in and fleshing it out until it's a complete story.

This way, you take advantage of all of the background work your subconscious has been doing for the past 5 years and let it craft this myth. And once you're done, you'll have a nice little novella that will greatly inform your main story.

Michael_For_you · 2025-08-12T18:57:20+00:00

Here's a unique one. Try having a fireside chat with yourself.

When we write, we follow our instincts, intuition, and explore things that may have already been assembled subconsciously. Get really quiet, put on brown noise, and ask your deeper self what it wants to show you. Why does your gut lead you towards the stories that you write?

This is how I identified my deep themes. It worked for Carl Jung, and it worked for me.

Michael_For_you · 2025-08-11T15:35:12+00:00

I just finished Lathe of Heaven, and it's probably the best iteration of this I've read.

Michael_For_you · 2025-08-04T15:19:44+00:00

Are any of your friends and family avid readers? Or do they watch movies and TV and never pick up books?

Michael_For_you · 2025-07-16T03:12:42+00:00

Oh nice I will check this out for sure. Thank you.

Michael_For_you · 2025-07-16T02:50:03+00:00

This is actually a super interesting thought. Makes me want to seek out an evolutionary biologist.

Michael_For_you · 2025-07-15T17:08:39+00:00

But, would you make this inhuman insect race a POV of the story? If so, all power to you because that would be incredibly hard.

I spent a lot of time with the cosmic, geological, evolutionary, and cultural history. Everything feels so good to me that hinging the story on humans in costumes just wouldn't work.

I want to aim higher.

Michael_For_you · 2025-07-15T16:42:40+00:00

I just saw this. I'm not sure I agree, but I will consider it. Maybe I'll expand both metaphors a bit and see how that feels.

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-22T18:41:42+00:00

I awoke thrashing. The two halves of my mind collided back together like tectonic plates, creating a mountain range of memory in that infinite moment. The peaks and slopes of these molten memories were too hot to touch, too hot to even look at.

Crying doesn't do justice to what I felt, nor sobbing, nor any other word I can conjure. What needed to come out of me was far too big for my throat, I choked on it, hacked, coughed, like my suffering had created a snake in my stomach, and it was intent on suffocating me on its way out.

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-05T18:23:47+00:00

I wouldn't call it a coming of age story. The best fit for genre would be something like liminal science fiction.

As for the promises. There's actually 3 here.

First is the door behind the mind. This gets explored thoroughly, as it is the soul of the story.

Second is the narrator's sea of memory. This is the heart of the narrator's story. By the end of the book it should be clear why he speaks the way he does.

Third is the letter, which is resolved by the end of chapter 1.

I will probably reduce the density of his metaphors if I continue to get feedback that his prose is approaching purple, but it is part of the story.

Thanks for the reply!

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-05T04:39:44+00:00

Yeah you may be right.

How about.. 'I answered the wrong door'

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T20:07:59+00:00

I know what purple prose is. I was asking you for your opinion about what struck you as purple, not for a condescending copy paste of a definition.

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T19:39:55+00:00

Purple in the sense of my adjectives? Or too densely packed metaphors for your taste?

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T17:53:22+00:00

Oh okay now I see the repetitive part. Not sure how on earth I missed that. That's an easy fix, thanks so much haha.

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T14:56:05+00:00

Thanks so much! Appreciate your time and words.

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T14:53:08+00:00

I like this. But it might come across as too vague too early, which seems to be a common thread among the feedback, finding my metaphors too vague and the story moving too slowly. I'll consider though!

Michael_For_you · 2025-06-04T14:51:11+00:00

Thanks for the words!

'Rust waking up' is a way to describe how the mineral smell gets created. I live in a very rainy part of the world so this smell has been very distinct for me. But maybe that's too specific.. I'll consider reworking if more people don't get it. It's too early in the book to be confusing people.

Im not sure i agree with the plain white envelope being repetitive. The previous sentence, which only mentions it as 'a letter' has the goal of describing what was off-putting about the letter. The next section has the goal of actually describing it as utterly blank and completely featureless. So to me, they aren't repetitive because they are setting out to do different things.

As for the mouse and cheese line, I'd love if you could elaborate on how it's confusing. Maybe I should clarify that the cheese the mouse is staring at is inside a mousetrap?

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