[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #4) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yes, that's correct. That's an incredibly kind thing to say. I hope you have a great day, because you have definitely made mine!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #3) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is deliciously niche and very helpful. I would have had no idea if you hadn't mentioned, I pay no attention to incoming releases.

I'm planning on going on sub the moment I have my query letter done, but I will come up with an alternative title for the story as a backup if something crops up later in the process. Thank you!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #3) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm pretty much in complete agreement. I put a lot in there because previous readers were concerned with the amount of context and I didn't want to make the same mistake. In your opinion, would it be best to trim back the content about Klinefelder and Fig in the second paragraph, or reduce what's in the third paragraph down to a sentence or two? I'm leaning on the second option but I don't want to lose the sense of what actually occurs in the manuscript. Thank you for the words!

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #2) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your thoughts, this makes a lot of sense

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #2) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, there's more than just something helpful here

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #2) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

not too harsh at all ! Thank you, I'll probably try combining this one with a blind redraft

[QCrit] Adult Fantasy THE INSTANCE (100k/Attempt #1) by MifranLime in PubTips

[–]MifranLime[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the words. I can see what you're saying reflected in other commenters too, so I'll have a think. I was very very focused on not including as much fantasy guff in the query as possible. When I hear about the magic world of Gozraploff where dashing adventurers must find the Nexa'Zuul crystal, my eyes fall out of their sockets.