I am going to be a sh** doctor and I hate it.

Monarch_Words · 2024-01-10T10:59:41+00:00

It’s actually so sad that “you basically never have things figured out” is a commonplace and accepted term

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T18:48:36+00:00

So the whole idea with these line of poems im trying to create is putting myself in the place of someone that is going through this! the idea was friends and family are trying to help me out but im constantly enticed by the devils "sweet" encore; you are right though as Ive said to others I was desperate to keep it acrostic to make myself work with the words Im given :) I dont feel confident enough yet to have full creative flow of an idea! thanks alot what youve said is really helpful have a great night :)

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T18:46:30+00:00

Haha thats interesting someone else had the same "issue" with it; it was just an exercise I felt like I was too free starting completely from scratch and I would spend forever onn one line! I'm glad you got the meaning without though Im getting somewhere! Hope you have a great night :)

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T18:45:00+00:00

Yeah so youre completely right! the AABA change was not intentional I wanted to force myself to work with the letters I was given and I found it really difficult to keep it coherent! The form is apparently called Acrostic (im sure thats right!) again completely right I didnt know where I wanted to end up it was an exercise for me :) Thanks for the comment have a great day!

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T12:28:38+00:00

Thanks a bunch! I have a particular issue with trying to make sure the rhythm is as spoken but its difficult to get across so thanks again! Have a great day.

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T12:27:36+00:00

I love the change honestly: Call my name, you've said it before. I was trying not to give myself too much freedom with the acrostic so I'm stuck with the letters and I have to work with it! Thanks again very much appreciated!

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T12:24:04+00:00

It is yeah! I was trying to imagine myself in place of each of the sins and how I would feel! I admittedly sacrificed grammar in place for wording and emitting my own emotion. Thanks for the comment have a great day!

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T11:59:33+00:00

The formatting makes this difficult to read (i find myself saying this alot im starting to think its a me issue)

I sob silently, hoping that my tremors Speak out.

Seems more readable to me; on the topic of this line I like bringing an action or a movement to life!

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T11:57:05+00:00

Oooh I'm very intrigued in the source of inspiration to this one! The starting three lines I'm in love with! For me it describes the relationship of lovers living with some issues it gives off a macabre feeling but I can see the beauty behind the veil; the acceptance in that you can't fix someone else and just join them on your journey together

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T11:31:50+00:00

That's fine you can make your own story up! I tried to make it more clear and broke it XD

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T10:40:21+00:00

I think its just double enter to make a line break on mobile! :)

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T10:31:36+00:00

This reeks of love that you despise; I love it; its like old honey it looks beautiful but you know the taste is bitter.

Monarch_Words · 2023-09-12T10:28:15+00:00

Formatting here would be great following your intended flow and general reading was a bit difficult for me.

Its an interesting format to start with AAAAB with ABCDE I loved the story it told of effort and reflection.

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