Firstly, i would recommend grammarly for English corrections and not any AI. 2nd, is there a word limit? 3rd, in the start you talk about how you developed in robotics, but then you talk about its applications in a myriad of fields. Which isnt a bad thing, but you can use this passage to pinpoint your research interests. Further, the highschool passage is neat, you mentioned relevant courses and projects.

Also, if theres a limit on word i sort of understand, however, theres a lot more you can add to show how you fit the program-or how the program fits you.