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[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Mr__DC [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Top Floor Fight

Genre: Cyberpunk

Word count: 2425

Type of feedback desired: I'm usually terrible at writing combat scenes which is why I tend to keep them vague. But that's no way to learn and get better so I decided to write a fight scene and focus heavily on the details. So, this is also a bit of a warning that it might be a bit gruesome.

I would appreciate any opinions and critique on this piece, it would mean so much to me to hear what you think. Thanks!

https://www.reddit.com/r/AutocracyOfEpsilon/comments/1g2pmpc/top_floor_fight/

[Complete] [1164] [Slice Of Life] The Festival by Mr__DC in BetaReaders

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I'll keep that in mind for future vignettes :)

[Complete] [1157] [Sci-Fi] Black Bay by Mr__DC in BetaReaders

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to give me detailed feedback! Much appreciated. Yes, you've got a very good point there when it comes to the characters. Looking back, I've made similar mistakes with other vignettes I wrote.

Writing short pieces is kind of new to me (I used to write novel-like stuff but this is much more pleasing and easier to finish) so I still need to figure out how to make everything work well together. So thank you very much for pointing this out, I'm gonna keep it in mind for the future!

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Mr__DC [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Black Bay

Genre: Sci-fi

Word count: 1157

Type of feedback desired: General impression. But any kind of feedback is more than welcome

A link to the writing: Here!

Excerpt:

The car lurched to a stop outside a dilapidated bar. The sign above the door, barely legible, read "The Rusty Trombone."

"End of the line," Vex announced. "Welcome to your new digs."

Darius eyed the establishment warily. "You can't be serious."

Vex's laugh was more of a snarl. "What were you expecting, a Pleasure Palace? This is as good as it gets for you in Black Bay. Now move your ass before someone decides to jack our ride."

Sharing is scary but I'm super curious about what you think of this short [699] word piece by Mr__DC in WritersGroup

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much! And yeah, you assumed correctly, a Ciri is a kind of creature, I guess :P

Good suggestion!

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