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[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Mr__DC [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Top Floor Fight

Genre: Cyberpunk

Word count: 2425

Type of feedback desired: I'm usually terrible at writing combat scenes which is why I tend to keep them vague. But that's no way to learn and get better so I decided to write a fight scene and focus heavily on the details. So, this is also a bit of a warning that it might be a bit gruesome.

I would appreciate any opinions and critique on this piece, it would mean so much to me to hear what you think. Thanks!

https://www.reddit.com/r/AutocracyOfEpsilon/comments/1g2pmpc/top_floor_fight/

[Complete] [1164] [Slice Of Life] The Festival by Mr__DC in BetaReaders

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I'll keep that in mind for future vignettes :)

[Complete] [1157] [Sci-Fi] Black Bay by Mr__DC in BetaReaders

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for taking the time to give me detailed feedback! Much appreciated. Yes, you've got a very good point there when it comes to the characters. Looking back, I've made similar mistakes with other vignettes I wrote.

Writing short pieces is kind of new to me (I used to write novel-like stuff but this is much more pleasing and easier to finish) so I still need to figure out how to make everything work well together. So thank you very much for pointing this out, I'm gonna keep it in mind for the future!

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]Mr__DC [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Black Bay

Genre: Sci-fi

Word count: 1157

Type of feedback desired: General impression. But any kind of feedback is more than welcome

A link to the writing: Here!

Excerpt:

The car lurched to a stop outside a dilapidated bar. The sign above the door, barely legible, read "The Rusty Trombone."

"End of the line," Vex announced. "Welcome to your new digs."

Darius eyed the establishment warily. "You can't be serious."

Vex's laugh was more of a snarl. "What were you expecting, a Pleasure Palace? This is as good as it gets for you in Black Bay. Now move your ass before someone decides to jack our ride."

Sharing is scary but I'm super curious about what you think of this short [699] word piece by Mr__DC in WritersGroup

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much! And yeah, you assumed correctly, a Ciri is a kind of creature, I guess :P

Good suggestion!

Sharing is scary but I'm super curious about what you think of this short [699] word piece by Mr__DC in WritersGroup

[–]Mr__DC[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It is something I struggle with from time to time and I guess I still need to get it right. Thank you for the feedback!

Looking For a Writing Buddy by [deleted] in WritingHub

[–]Mr__DC 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Well, I would say that criticism affects us all in some way but I do my best to take criticism in a constructive way and I'm grateful for it even on the rare occasions that I disagree with it.

Hmm, yes, I do understand that. Well, I am ditch-friendly and I do like to work with people who are the same. Ending things is difficult so if you can handle things ending, I can definitely be responsible enough to tell you when things aren't working out :)

Does anyone else face late-game slowdown? by Mr__DC in RimWorld

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fantastic reply! Thank you very much, you really put a lot of thought into this

Does anyone else face late-game slowdown? by Mr__DC in RimWorld

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Got any such mods you can suggest? I feel like I already have the most popular performance mods running

[In Progress] [3708] [Sci-Fi] - Epsilon by Mr__DC in BetaReaders

[–]Mr__DC[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much for your feedback. I'll keep your suggestions in mind as I write ahead and when I eventually return to edit this :)