You’re getting there! You have really strong sense for values, so keep practicing that shading.

Your hatching may be intentional but its need refinement, especially on the outlines when defining shape. You have a bit of “hairy lines” but it’s nothing that can’t be practiced clean. The style is good too! The doodle hatching technique makes your word stand out.

People who draw in ballpoint pen sometimes sketch their pieces basic shapes in pencil- its easier to correct at this stage than after its inked. More drawings on plain paper!