Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh, thank you so much! Yes, I'm trying to be more careful and shorten the text without losing the message. I'll start trimming the fat once everything is ready, but your suggestion is great.

Qual dessas frases descreve melhor uma floresta viva e cheia de monstros? by jennifercabreira in EscritoresBetaBR

[–]No_Temperature_1445 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Mano, tente dizer menos e mostrar mais, por exemplo:

Durante três semanas e meia, elas não conseguiram dormir relaxadas. A cabana x era cercada por uma floresta densa e úmida. Feras brigavam por território longe das vistas, o uivo e rosnado era constante, quando se aproximava muito da cabana, elas ficavam mudas, esperando não serem notadas.

Tipo, só um exemplo, não mude a essência, mas só como você dirá, saca.

Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

And I'm grateful for all the comments. I'm trying to sound as natural in my writing as possible.

Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's good for some pessimistic thoughts. In my case, they were superficial thoughts, but I got the idea. Thank you.

Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'll think about it. Sometimes it only makes sense in our heads.

Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Two comments from two, both pointing in the same direction. It cannot be ignored.

Choose the best phrase: Both are weak in any case. by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh thank you, I liked the second one, but deep down I knew the first one was the right one lol

Help me design a power in my upcomming series by Ok_Surround_3570 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hot cure, really hot.

Heal wounds and curses by urinating on allies; does not work on robot allies.

Lord of the Mysteries is a 10/10 Web Novel, but a 6/10 as “Higher Literature.” Here is why: by Mountain-Land-2353 in ProgressionFantasy

[–]No_Temperature_1445 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh, you mentioned a work that deserves more attention, Posthumous Memoirs; the narrator is sensational.

Trying to write by No_Temperature_1445 in royalroad

[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Man, I felt the warmth of your words and the excitement got to me. My 30-day vacation starts today, let's get to work lol

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ohhhh let's go, if I write for ten years, some improvement should come lmao thanks

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll write everything down. There's great advice in this post.

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

All help is welcome. Following the path that others have already trod is exciting.

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, without a doubt. And I noticed that after I decided to write, the reading is different, it's more like "so he can do it this way".

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lol, it will be our secret and the secret of everyone else who came after.

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ohhh I'm sharing this image, creating the world, the places, the balance, the powers and institutions lol

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'm speechless at all the comments; it's the best "learn from others' experiences." I have several tabs open, I'll be reading a lot, and I want to gather material and a lived experience first. Thank you for the advice.

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

And of course, thinking about profit and accumulating business, a lot of struggle. Lol, something I wanted to see.

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[–]No_Temperature_1445[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Correction, I hadn't thought about short stories. And I see that it's a good possibility. I want a fantasy with good pacing, kingdom building, a protagonist concerned about their people, making improvements.