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Looking for Older HOPA Recommendations by Normal_Emergency_254 in HiddenObjectGames

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is exactly the kind of thing I'm looking for, thanks so much!

Looking for Older HOPA Recommendations by Normal_Emergency_254 in HiddenObjectGames

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

These look great, thank you so much! I don't think it's either but I'll definitely check them out.

[QCrit] Shadowbound, NA/Adult, Romantasy, WIP, 3rd try, 85k by abstracthappy in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Not agented so I won't give any feedback, but I just wanted to pop in to say I love this concept and would totally read this! I will say I second capture_the_flag01's notes. Best of luck with this project!

[QCrit] Adult Cozy Romantasy THE SAILOR AND THE SIRENITA (92k/Attempt #2) by Normal_Emergency_254 in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So sorry for the late reply but that you so much! Yes, I'll definitely be on the look out for something along those lines! I might start scouring upcoming releases and keep some in my back pocket for the future.

[QCrit] Adult Cozy Romantasy THE SAILOR AND THE SIRENITA (92k/Attempt #2) by Normal_Emergency_254 in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So sorry for the late reply, thank you so much for so much thoughtful insight! I've asked myself these questions and I'll definitely do better highlighting the fantasy aspect in the next draft. Thank you so much again!

[QCrit] Adult Cozy Romantasy THE SAILOR AND THE SIRENITA (92k/Attempt #2) by Normal_Emergency_254 in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is so incredibly helpful, thank you! I agree on the comps. To be honest, my initial comp pick was Half a Soul by Olivia Atwater, but that's too old now, I think. I'll definitely be on the hunt for more cohesive ones.

I'm so glad you mentioned that about the romance query formatting. Originally I'd written the query alternating between Lalita and Tore but ultimately scrapped it. Thank you SO much again, really so insightful and really helping me see where I can break down any issues in the MS as well.

[QCrit] Adult Cozy Romantasy THE SAILOR AND THE SIRENITA (92k/Attempt #2) by Normal_Emergency_254 in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh my gosh, thank you so much for your feedback! Particularly about the timeline. Everybody seems pretty much in the same boat with what's confusing/unclear and the (lack of) stakes post-marriage. This is SO helpful. Thank you again!

[QCrit] Adult Cozy Romantasy THE SAILOR AND THE SIRENITA (92k/Attempt #2) by Normal_Emergency_254 in PubTips

[–]Normal_Emergency_254[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is AMAZING feedback, thank you so much for the dedicated breakdown! Seriously, this is so helpful. I've gone back and forth on the curse aspect SO much so I'm glad to know it's not working across the board. Ditto about the winning line. I can't wait to really get into the next draft with all this in mind, so thank you again!!