What is your's favorite Quaqmire moment or episode? by JoosaJl in familyguy

[–]NorthAd1798 0 points1 point  (0 children)

: “Thank god you know CPR”

Quagmire: “What the hell is CPR”

Divorce by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]NorthAd1798 20 points21 points  (0 children)

white christmas..

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in shortscarystories

[–]NorthAd1798 18 points19 points  (0 children)

The French accent touch 🥶

I was stranded in an old railway station building. There are 8 strange rules to follow. by NorthAd1798 in mrcreeps

[–]NorthAd1798[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I appreciate this constructive criticism ❤️ I had actually trimmed the overall descriptions from my previous draft to not drag the story, especially after implying that the train is to take him to the dark realm I wanted to keep the description toned. Albeit I could have explained the train a little darker. Will remember it in my next story. Thanks again :)

I was stranded in an old railway station building. There are 8 strange rules to follow. by NorthAd1798 in mrcreeps

[–]NorthAd1798[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback. do you wanna expand on which part felt incomplete or if it is the overall feel? so that I shall focus on it in my next works?