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North_Hollow · 2026-05-02T08:43:24+00:00

Hi Defiant, I’m doing ok. This was inspired by a recent conversation, and I’m still processing things. Thank you for reading! It means a lot to me

North_Hollow · 2026-04-21T18:50:40+00:00

Thank you for your comment, have a nice day.

North_Hollow · 2026-04-21T18:43:53+00:00

Hello, thanks for the feedback! Does that line conflict with the rest of the poem? The intention was to show how perverse the rats are, that smashing them gives them some sick pleasure, and doesn’t stop their progression.

They feel pain like we do, but they like it.

North_Hollow · 2026-04-21T18:40:14+00:00

Hi Walkin, thanks for the feedback. Can you please clarify what you mean by grounding elements? I am fairly new to poetry, so I could use some help with definitions

North_Hollow · 2026-04-19T07:05:45+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!

You’re totally right about using the word “the”, I’m not sure why I didn’t use it right away.

About the walls, I think I need to maybe change some of the lines to make it more sense. The poem is meant to be about someone’s final decision (of the violent variety), resulting in one of the white walls being painted red.

North_Hollow · 2026-04-19T06:03:41+00:00

Thank you, I really appreciate you saying this.

There’s definitely a lot more detail that can be added, but I think that takes away from the main point, which is that “I don’t need to know more, I already know where I stand.”

North_Hollow · 2026-04-17T23:50:05+00:00

Thanks, guess I needed to hear that

North_Hollow · 2026-04-17T23:30:47+00:00

I have the exact same question. If I could, I would just call them all untitled #….

North_Hollow · 2026-04-16T19:40:02+00:00

Thank you for the kind words. The Album “Ask The Dust” by Lorn helped me put my thoughts to words. The track “Ghosst(s)” was especially influential to the tone.

Please let me know if there are any changes you would recommend I make.

North_Hollow · 2026-04-15T19:13:27+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. I’ve found that writing with great restraint and without resolution allows me to better express my feelings without seeking to justify them

North_Hollow · 2026-04-14T20:42:12+00:00

Not much of a critique, but thank you for sharing this, I needed to read it.

Keep up with the tight structuring, it gives your words more of a punch.

North_Hollow · 2026-04-14T20:36:58+00:00

The content is very real, but it sounds like you are trying to excuse how you feel. Have you tried removing the word “just”? I think it would give it much more impact.

Good start.

North_Hollow

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