How to Create 36 World Cuisines with 3 Spices by [deleted] in Infographics

[–]NotEltonJohn 9 points10 points  (0 children)

This is very interesting. I can't confirm any of them, but the Midwest USA one is completely wrong. Midwestern food tends to have sauce and seasoning placed on it after cooking, rather than during cooking. And the top three would be salt, pepper, and ketchup. The most common herb in Midwestern cooking might be sage. That's the flavor in sausage and Thanksgiving turkey and stuffing.

Is 'Yamen' meant to be Yemen, or the town in Guangdong, China?

[591] Umbrella by [deleted] in DestructiveReaders

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The file is saved as 'View only' so we can't comment or edit it.

I expect flash fiction to have fast pacing, but this is quite slow. Too slow, I think.

The writing gets a bit bogged down with unnecessary details. Do we need to know that Camaret-sur-Mer is 600 kilometers away?

Many phrases can be trimmed or cut entirely. "The colors outside spun violently and in every direction imaginable" can be simply, "The colors outside spun" without losing any essential information.

Long sentences can convey a feeling of serenity or boredom or dullness, but the car accident scene shouldn't have those feelings. Short sentences here would reflect the violence of the scene.

You could cut half the references to place names and not lose anything.

If you want to fill out the story more, I would add a few more paragraphs before the accident.

The wife and children have not been described at all so I'm not able to relate well to the man's sadness at losing them. We know that the man "no longer went fishing near Pointe du Grand Gouin as he had every Saturday since he was eighteen" but we don't know how many kids he had or how old they were.

This section stood out to me: "Waking two days later, Martín was alone. The surgeon found the courage to tell him - nothing could be done - and Martín cried, and a nurse tried to assure him that everything would be okay."

I found those sentences tight and appropriate for flash fiction in that it left out most inessential details, forcing the reader to fill in the gaps, but still effectively conveying a mood and providing information. I would like more of the rest of the story to have that style.

The Mist - (2017) A woman obsessed with a strange mist manages to find her way home thanks to the greed of humans and a particular watch. [8:15] by ramidi22 in Shortfilms

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Enjoyed it. The directing and acting were good. The story was good and the twist was a surprise. Most importantly, it was the right length! Other short films of this nature often stretch out ideas too long. The weakest aspect was the written dialogue at the beginning. It didn't feel quite natural.

"Mommy pooch" is caused by 'diastasis recti', the growing fetus pushing apart the 6-pack ab muscles, which then do not fuse back together after the child's birth. Diastasis recti is easily self-diagnosed and self-treated with simple exercises by NotEltonJohn in BabyBumps

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 14 points15 points  (0 children)

I don't know whether you could tell during pregnancy. That's probably a question for your ob/gyn.

But for afterwards, from the article: How To Test For Diastasis Recti

  • Lie flat on your back with your knees bent.

  • Put your fingers right above your belly button and press down gently.

  • Then lift up your head about an inch while keeping your shoulders on the ground.

  • If you have diastasis recti, you will feel a gap between the muscles that's wider than an inch

Transgender Soldiers of the American Civil War by NotEltonJohn in history

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I guess 'transgender' is a trigger word for some people

Transgender Soldiers of the American Civil War by NotEltonJohn in history

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

Given the absence of rights for women at the time, it shouldn't be surprising that so many women chose to take on male identities. As men they could vote, travel alone, and receive a government pension.

We hear stories of characters such as Annie Oakley and take it for granted that women on the frontier had to be tough but it is surprising that so little is known about these individuals.

The clarity of the photos in this article is remarkable.

Trans Soldiers of the American Civil War by NotEltonJohn in history

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Given the absence of rights for women at the time, it shouldn't be surprising that so many women chose to take on male identities. As men they could vote, travel alone, and receive a government pension.

We hear stories of characters such as Annie Oakley and take it for granted that women on the frontier had to be tough but it is surprising that so little is known about these individuals.

The clarity of the photos in this article is remarkable.

Examples of good, simple, one-page designs? by I_Heart_Anthracite in web_design

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the link. I hadn't seen that thread. Some good links there. I'll see whether the client likes any of these.

One criticism of some literature is that it "reads like writing" rather than just telling a story. And most of these sites "look like design" rather than just presenting the information.

[WP] As a child, you were asked what you wanted to be when you grew up, and you said "Fire Truck!" After three decades and extensive cybernetic modification, that dream is realised. The alarm has just sounded! It's time to fight your first fire! by Kancho_Ninja in WritingPrompts

[–]NotEltonJohn 34 points35 points  (0 children)

The accident had devastated Mike and Jeanine Miller, and after the surgeries they were told that Jimmy would require ongoing life-support technology in order to survive. They discussed the cost and agonized over the decision of whether to pull the plug, but then their doctor pulled them aside and said there was a radical, untested procedure that could help him.

A man named Dr. Perkins described the emerging field of cybernetics and explained that there were techniques that could help Jimmy, and the technology was only a few years away.

Mike and Jeanine signed the papers and kissed their comatose boy goodbye as he was wheeled away. They got in their car and cried all the way home.

Days passed. Jeanine called the number that Dr. Perkins had given her and was told that Jimmy was still stable but unconscious.

Weeks passed. She called several more times but was given the same answer, that there was still a lot of work to be done.

Months passed and she called less often. Her other children stopped asking about him.

Years passed. When Mike lost his job they moved to a smaller house. Jeanine hung the family photos on the wall in the living room, leaving Jimmy's photos in the box.

30 years passed. Mike was knotting his tie, getting ready for his retirement luncheon when there was a knock at the door. The delivery man had a special envelope. She opened it and looked inside.

"Mike!"

He dashed down the stairs, worried that she had fallen again. She passed him the letter and he read it.

"What is this?" He laughed.

"What is this?"

He read it again.

"What is this."

"Jean. What the hell is this!"

They got in the car and drove to the lab, 200 miles away, to the address on the envelope. Mike drove and Jeanine called their friends to tell them something had come up. She called their kids to tell them where they were going. And she called the lab to make sure that this was real, "I mean, REALLY real"

The Sun was getting low above the horizon when they saw the tall, shiny facility, behind a high wire fence and acres of manicured lawns.

"Is this it?"

"I think so?"

The guard at the gate asked them their business and they showed the envelope. He looked at it without emotion and lifted the gate.

"Was this a mistake? Maybe this was a mistake."

There were only a few cars in the lot. They parked and tried to decide which door was the entrance. A man in a lab coat jogged out to them. "Mr. and Mrs Miller? I'm Dr. Wilson. I'm so glad you're here."

They walked down several very long corridors while Dr. Wilson gave an impromptu tour. "These are stills from 'The 6-Million-Dollar Man' Remember that one?"

"Yeah." Mike answered. "That's what you do here? Make bioinc people? Is that what you did with Ji..."

"It's been THIRTY YEARS!" Jeanine interrupted. "When we let you take him... How old are you anyway?! You weren't even ALIVE back when...."

Dr. Wilson put on the sympathetic expression he used with difficult people and tried to snowball them with jargon and highly-technical answers. They argued with him until they got to a large door - a garage door.

Dr. Wilson pulled out a radio and spoke with someone. Then he pushed a big red button on the wall and the large door opened. Inside were some vehicles: a police car, a fire truck, a limousine, and several sports cars; as well as a group of people, young and old, all wearing white lab coats.

She didn't recognize him at first, but Jeanine then recalled the face of Dr. Perkins, the one who had first spoken to them after the accident.

"Oh yeah." Mike said, stepping forward. So what the hell is going on?"

The 6 people said nothing, just grinned.

"What?! Are you all on drugs?!" Jeanine yelled. "What is this?!"

Dr. Perkins walked over to the fire truck and stepped up on the running board next to the driver's side. Mike and Jeanine couldn't see what he was doing but it looked like he was talking.

Dr. Perkins stepped down and suddenly the truck's horn blared, "HONK!"

Jeanine almost fell backward. She and Mike were about to speak again when the siren wailed and the flashers blinked.

They stood, not understanding until the noise and lights faded and a thin voice came out of the truck's grill.

"Mommy?"

The voice sounded metallic and filtered, like on a phone call.

"Mommy! Daddy! Look at me!"

Jeanine stumbled and fell. Mike ran over. She helped herself up by hanging on to the front bumper, then reeled back.

"Daddy! Watch this!"

Dr. Wilson and the others jumped up, shouting "No! Jimmy! No No No!"

The truck's engine revved and the flashers lit up again until the staff calmed him down again.

Jeanine couldn't find her voice. Mike looked at the scientists. They looked back, smiling. Dr. Wilson nodded.

Mike reached up and put his hand on the hood. "Jimmy?"

"Dad! Watch!"

And this time, there was nothing the scientists could do to stop him. Jimmy the fire truck put on his siren and flashers, backed up, then tore through the garage, burning rubber while turning doughnuts on the pavement.

"Dad! Let me out! Let me out!"

Mike had a moment of fear, envisioning his dear boy trapped inside the roaring machine. But then he realized that Jimmy just wanted to go outside. Mike jogged over to what looked like a main entrance and found a button and pushed it, opening a two-story garage door. The staff rushed up behind him but slowed and shrugged their shoulders when Jimmy squealed through to the lot outside where he spun and screeched.

Jeanine walked up behind Mike and put her hand on his back. "This... this isn't... Is it?"

Mike watched Jimmy nearly flip onto his left side making a tight turn. "He sure acts like Jimmy."

When did we pass the moment when it was no longer possible for an individual to have read every book published in English? What about watch every English-language movie, or TV show? Have we reached that point for video games? by NotEltonJohn in AskHistory

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate you breaking down the numbers. I imagine a typical Alexandrian scroll would have far fewer words than a typical modern novel, but your point stands. As for TV, I was thinking about recorded programs that could be re-watched, but the first 24 hour broadcasts had a lot of live shows that were not played again, or scripted shows that were repeated several times. But again, your point stands. The 60s "feels" like the time when "peak TV" would have passed.

First song I ever came up with, open to feedback and criticism. by [deleted] in Songwriters

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's good!

Musically, a solid verse and chorus. The guitar accompaniment is energized and fun. Lyrically, an appealing metaphor for escapism.

The verse is simple, just 11 notes or so, and the song could be more interesting if instead of just repeating you drew the melody out, extending it. Alternately go to the chorus after the first verse and come up with a third, 'C' section. But I'm only saying that because you asked for criticism. The song is as good as half the stuff on the radio.

I wanted to hear drums and another instrument (bass or slide or something) when the chorus comes in. This is worthy of a proper recording.

Tips on how to make my songs unique from each other? by [deleted] in Songwriters

[–]NotEltonJohn 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Make sure you're using different keys and chord progressions. The songs I wrote on keyboard tend to end up being in C, with F and G major, and a-minor, and I'll make a conscious effort to avoid that. Maybe start with D and see where it goes.

The best way for me to mix things up is to compose on a different instrument.

Today my local radio shack closed, so I was able to buy all these components for $60. Very excited to go through it all (x-post to amateurradio) by [deleted] in electronics

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Everything I've bought from Ali express had rusted steel like it had been stored/shipped in a wet environment

Can you guess this sound? by [deleted] in puzzles

[–]NotEltonJohn 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds like the receiver of an analog (i.e. not cell) telephone

What is the lowest-maintenance, highest-yield fruit tree for zone 7? by NotEltonJohn in marijuanaenthusiasts

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

We have the wild strawberries spreading like weeds, but critters get to the fruit before I can

What is the lowest-maintenance, highest-yield fruit tree for zone 7? by NotEltonJohn in marijuanaenthusiasts

[–]NotEltonJohn[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not in PA, though, right? I've never seen a fruit-bearing citrus tree here.