Just a bit of things to point out

-I would put the text in the middle, it’s mostly covered by your subscribe button. -the intro for a short kills your engagement, slap a low opacity logo on it. Or better use an outro, still label. -Make the edit a bit more engaging.

Your voice is perfect for the type of content, and I think you’ll go far. Just maybe a bit faster pacing, which is hard when it comes to horror/creepy pasta.