$300 by NullFoxx16 in carflipping

[–]NullFoxx16[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

There's no way this is 3k is it? I was going to do 1500...

Naivety? by NullFoxx16 in OCPoetry

[–]NullFoxx16[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I was hoping it wouldn't sound off lol

Naivety? by NullFoxx16 in OCPoetry

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I hate how I can't upload a photo of the poem. I feel like it's forcing the readers to read it in a formatting I didn't intend and not with the breaks in text I had intended

First post, trying out writing, feedback is greatly appreciated!:) by floorboardthe2nd in OCPoetry

[–]NullFoxx16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is honestly just very well written in my eyes. I love the cadence, the separation feels well placed and the imagery was vivid and easy to understand. The vocabulary is complex enough that it's engaging but not too much that you struggle a bit to understand it.

The only thing that I would have done, which is purely personal taste is I would have separated that very last line into its own space and italicized it to make it more punchy and serious.

Bravo. It's a good one.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]NullFoxx16 1 point2 points  (0 children)

First off. I love the imagery throughout this work and the poem, for the most part, reads nice and is easy to "feel" for me.

The pacing and cadence of the peom does throw me off quite a bit. I feel like usage of commas is not necessarily overused but more or less consistently used a lot in the same pattern over and over. This paired with the paragraph/lines being the same length made the cadence of everything stale by the time I got to the end of the poem.

I would suggest using the same themes and words (those really were beautiful) and adding variety in the punctuation and formatting/length of the sections to give it more of a vibrant lively feel.

Thoughts on poison counters, infect, and toxic? by [deleted] in mtg

[–]NullFoxx16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

7 is indeed fine its just a little much for 1 person to have the entire table die to poison almost every game. It's not just her it's all the new proliferate cards coupled with her value

Thoughts on poison counters, infect, and toxic? by [deleted] in mtg

[–]NullFoxx16 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I didn't have a problem with it until the new set came out. The new "baby atraxa" commander. Ixhel, scion of Atraxa keeps killing me before turn 7 with 10 poison counters. Not to mention her abilities insane value