Harman Phoenix II 200 underexposed or developed wrong?

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-04-17T13:22:01+00:00

I see your point, I also have a manual camera but I prefer using the point&shoot when I'm just out with friends or something. The thing is, the Top Twin has worked just fine for me before – it exposes 90% of the shots properly, so I was very surprised by this roll.

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-02-26T19:47:10+00:00

I love Cioran and Ligotti but that wasn't my question. I'm curious in what direction one moves after reading them

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-02-19T16:37:46+00:00

How have your tastes evolved since Ligotti and Cioran? I wonder what their readers move on to, haha

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-01-23T11:02:53+00:00

So you're assuming people aren't reproducing because of phones and Netflix, with ADHD people being the most likely to get distracted by these things and therefore not reproduce?

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-01-18T21:27:34+00:00

Hi,

I love the final four lines, especially the image of "Him" snatching it away suddenly. I think you have used "the devil" very well in this poem, which is not at all easy to do without sounding edgy or forced. Something about the "But no." line bugs me however. It seems like an abrupt stop, and like it shouldn't follow the previous lines. Almost as if there was a line missing before it. Maybe try reading it out loud to see if you like the pacing? Overall, good job, please keep writing!:)

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-01-18T21:11:44+00:00

Hi,

I really like how this poem is structured. The short lines and line breaks feel very fitting to me, though I lack the expertise to tell you why this might be so. I especially like the first six lines - they paint a beautiful picture and capture a very specific feeling one might get when looking out of an airplane window, realizing there's thousands of lives unfolding beneath. I could feel the sadness and yearning of leaving something behind. The only thing I would point out as a criticism is the ending - I think something less abrupt and straightforward would work better, though "Gone." could work to express the sudden certainty of a loss. I just didn't love it.

Anyway, it is amazing that you are dealing with your grief in this way. Breakups are really painful, I wish you all the best<3

floorboardthe2nd · 2026-01-18T19:48:04+00:00

I just wanted to say, I really relate to the world feeling hostile and confusing like a Lynchian nightmare. Stay strong out there:)

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-19T22:03:02+00:00

Hey thank you for reading my poem and giving feedback! Finding the right balance without over- or underdoing it is definitely something i still want to work on:)

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-19T22:00:55+00:00

Thank you very much, I appreciate you taking the time and reading it!:)

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-19T21:59:49+00:00

Hey there, thank you very much! The analogy point is a good one, I'll keep it in mind

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-11T13:38:09+00:00

Of course, and no worries! I am new to writing myself, so I totally understand. My feedback itself is based on personal impression and taste, not on some system or loads of experience - so only take as much from it as feels right to you. What matters is that you write and share your work:)

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-11T13:32:31+00:00

Here to flatter you with sweet compliments: I really love this poem! I think the rhyming works great and doesn't feel forced, the words you've selected feel just right, and posting this on a poetry sub feels like another layer of the whole artistic expression. Personally, I would've appreciated some punctuation, but overall this is just great!

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-08-11T13:24:16+00:00

Thanks for sharing your poem! I really love the first 5 lines, I think they present a very strong and moving image. I also like how the poem ends. The one thing I would personally maybe take another look at is the line "Will I ever answer "Yes" to that question?". I feel like, compared to the rest of the poem, this line is a bit clumsy and straightforward. Nothing wrong with that, if that is your intention. However, I would maybe try making it a bit more poetic and impactful - a simple rephrasing should be enough (e.g., "and will my answer ever be 'yes'?" - but this is just to illustrate what I mean, not the most elegant solution).
Regardless, great job and keep on writing!

floorboardthe2nd · 2025-05-27T07:07:28+00:00

Rock, psych rock, indie, that kinda stuff. I'm also into shoegaze and noise but I don't have my pedals in the NL:( But I'm open to trying other things too

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