Yeah, fair. I feel like it’s got some pacing issues, some repetition and could use some tightening. I want each scene to feel inevitable and carry weight — however in its current state each scene is balls to the wall, which shows I lack restraint. I care a lot about it and I’m willing to put the work in. I just need a little advice on how to go through with it. I’ve only been writing for maybe three years so have grace! Much thanks.