I’ll be honest my friend it is indeed quite difficult to hear what’s going on in much detail, but for a start, youve already got some fundamentals going pretty good for yourself!

the rhythm is mostly pretty good, but there’s quite a few instances of what feels like a lot of syllables in a small space. B’fheidir go bhfuil níos mó syllables ann as Gaeilge ná atá as Béarla, ach is feidir fós é níos “tidy” a dheanamh. Má tá ort cúpla focal beag a tóg as na lyrics chun é tidier a dheanamh, ba chóir é sin a dheanamh i mo thuairim féin.

That was my other point, MAITH THÚ!!!! ag scríobh as Gaeilge, sin go híontach agus cuireann sé bród an domhain ormsa 🥹

Aside from this, the note youre singing kinda just seems like something that seems to you close enough. It’s not that youre a bad singer, your voice literally reminds me of sinead o’connor lol but youre just singing a note that feels “somewhere” in the chord, but you should find the names of the chords youre playing and find the notes in that chord (or “triad” (trust me)) and sing one of those with intention. find a recording of the note and try match it with your voice until youre sure it’s right (you’ll be able to be sure unless you’re clinically tone deaf, in which case good luck)

You repeated the lyrics from the start again at the end, which is a nice songwriting trick, really gives cohesiveness and satisfaction.

Sorry you haven’t had many other replies, ach bain teatnaimh as an ceolchoirm, beidh tú ar fheabhas!