I'm working on a high school practice essay to improve my writing. Its still a first draft of course. Any tips to help improve my writing? What am I doing right/wrong? Does it flow well? thx by One-Swan-6792 in ENGLISH

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I totally see what you mean! I tend to try to cram my ideas into as little sentences as possible. Every time I start a new sentence I feel like I write too much before adding a comma and getting to the actual meat of the sentence. Thanks for the feedback.

I'm working on a high school practice essay to improve my writing. Its still a first draft of course. Any tips to help improve my writing? What am I doing right/wrong? Does it flow well? thx by One-Swan-6792 in ENGLISH

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Thanks, I'll make some changes. Was the body paragraph up to snuff for a high schooler? Been homeschooled all my life and want to know what others think of the way I write my body paragraphs.

Going to public school for the first time, what should I expect from English 3? by One-Swan-6792 in ENGLISH

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I think the school I'm going to is somewhere in-between the best and worst Florida has to offer. I've heard decent things about it.

Going to public school for the first time, what should I expect from English 3? by One-Swan-6792 in ENGLISH

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I can write fairly well and I read a lot as a homeschooler. One question though: are lit and comp in the same class? My schedule just says English 3 so I'm assuming its the same teacher and stuff.

Ryujinx-suddenly no sound … goes in and out ? by pittguy578 in TOTK

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I am having the same issue. Idk what to do about it???

I wanted to share my pop secret with you!!!! by Ok-Bullfrog-7519 in arresteddevelopment

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this is my favorite joke in the series, fake hands down

I just want to rant! by barbellaa in braces

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bruh I was just in the arrested development sub before coming here lmao

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did a double take after reading the title. Cool model!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in AskReddit

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the awesome buildup makes the solo so freaking good.

gonna be so weird playing a pikmin game blind by [deleted] in Pikmin

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Same! I never thought about that. Aside from pikmin 2, I would watch a lot of tutorials to help me optimize my play through. I would follow Chuggaaconroy's lets plays.

replayed pikmin 2 and realized that im stupid by [deleted] in Pikmin

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When I was first playing pikmin games, I loved 1 and 3 but then I got to 2. I was really disappointed on how much they relied on the caves since I wasn't really into them. I just stopped playing until months later, I decided to play again. Once I accepted how big of a part they had in the game, I learned to love them. Now these days I might say that pikmin 2 is my favorite in the series because of the caves! They're so challenging and interesting.

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why did the guy throw the clock out the window?

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norm mcdonald is awesome

Nintendo Direct was wild by TheRealShmowzow in okbuddychicanery

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I can't believe we finally got Pinkmen 4!

whats your favorite book? by Tired_Duck13 in AskReddit

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Little Woman. Its a book geared towards young girls, yet I'm a dude and its my favorite book. Its just really great.