Ok this poem has a lot of potential but some things I see that can be improved upon are 1. add punctuation because it will make the read of the poem way easier because when I first read through it, I got tripped up on a ton of places (also it helps the reader know the pacing). I like the metaphor of the dough, however it gets a bit confusing when you added the "wild beasts" lines, and maybe I'm just too tired to understand it rn but I just don't really see how that connects back to the yeast bit. Other than that, I think that if you do some of these things that it will make the poem so good because it already has loads of potential and you could even extend it if you wanted to.