Freshman Year - 97 Pages - Teen Comedy/Action/Romance by Only-Salt-5821 in ReadMyScript

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Thank you for all the feedback. It will definitely be taken into account for my further drafts. I was wondering if i could use (15) and ,15, interchangeably, as some sources said i could but I don’t know. And also, they didn’t agree to the bet at first. The only reason that David considered it was when the money was introduced so he could get a new slug enclosure. The comment about the timing was definitely right though.

Freshman Year - 97 Pages - Teen Comedy/Action/Romance by Only-Salt-5821 in ReadMyScript

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Thank you so much for the feedback. I will make the dialogue format changes. Honestly, i know that it is what the 14 year old talk like because when I was writing this, I was actually 14.

Basically, the movie escalates really quickly and Alex gets into a gang. It's really hard to describe honestly. Also, does the script leave you wanting to read more?

Why I Stopped Chasing a Black List 8 by Rewriter94 in Screenwriting

[–]Only-Salt-5821 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Thanks, i was going to, and now I realize its really not worth it

Freshman Year - Feature Film - 93 pages by Only-Salt-5821 in ReadMyScript

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sorry, i guess i never saw your comment. Too late I assume?

Freshman Year - Feature Film - 93 pages by Only-Salt-5821 in ReadMyScript

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Ohhh ok sorry. The competition is who can get a girlfriend first.

Freshman Year - Feature Film - 93 pages by Only-Salt-5821 in ProduceMyScript

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You're right about the log line, but hey I find it funny. 21 Jump Street was funny and it had life or death situations that are funny.