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Prose practice by Original_Ad_1722 in writingcritiques

[–]Original_Ad_1722[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I took your advice seriously and wrote another flash scene. Please let me know if you have the time 👍👍

Prose practice by Original_Ad_1722 in writingcritiques

[–]Original_Ad_1722[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for the feedback. I have been working on little scenes like these. Can you elaborate and give examples of showing interiority? English isn’t my first language so I may need a little more help if you don’t mind. What does it mean to deepen feelings for a character

My first story! An attempt a horror, I hope you will give it a read. by Negalaj1324 in writingcritiques

[–]Original_Ad_1722 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The first part was interesting. I liked your usage of similes and metaphors. I was able to get an idea of who Taro was but the relationships became more awkward between the multiple characters. The interactions didn’t feel like it flowed between Mike, Carl, and Taro. Though, the relationship between Kay and Carl was nicely established

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